Awaiting the Fall

by Max Bouillet

Just an apple on an overwhelmed branch,
drooping toward the water.
With every breath of wind,
I kiss the creek and become
dappled and drunk with autumn
and dying.

My grave swishes beneath.
It is withdrawn, yet seductive
and eager to swallow.
I seize my reflection
and become aware
of the leaves embellishing me.
A droplet trickles and
falls into the depths
and into my fate.

My reflection falters.
The droplet forms ripples,
and the ripples form rainbows
of autumnal leaves
bursting into death blossoms.

I am over the rainbow, and
just like Oz
I will be content
to enjoy my grand facade.


Author's Note: Thanks for the suggestions Krista.

Posted on 08/30/2003
Copyright © 2020 Max Bouillet

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Graeme Fielden on 08/30/03 at 05:52 PM

Max - I saw the title and I really wasn't sure what to expect...all types of visuals!...I've sure known that feeling of the apple - the last line really summed it up - nice work...

Posted by Amanda J Cobb on 08/30/03 at 10:42 PM

"dappled and drunk with autumn and dying" - wow, wonderful lyricism and imagery, not just in this line, but the whole thing. Beautiful piece here, Max. :)

Posted by Vimal Rony on 08/31/03 at 01:43 AM

Photographic words and out of the world writing.

Posted by Quentin S Clingerman on 08/31/03 at 02:15 AM

Intriguing symbolism. Colorful imagery. There is the death of summer in the autumn leaves. Death must come to renew winter's white breeze.

Posted by Don Coffman on 09/01/03 at 02:37 AM

A wonderfully done bit of symbolic poetry. Just like an apple; attractive on the surface with lots to enjoy on the inside.

Posted by Rachelle Howe on 09/02/03 at 03:24 PM

max! where is my coffee?! *laughs* ah, i'll drink this in, then... and drink, i did. perfect blend of sugar and punch. i agree, the last line is rockin'.

Posted by Philip F De Pinto on 09/03/03 at 06:19 PM

the images, scintillating and foreboding with afterglow.

Posted by Anne Engelen on 09/03/03 at 07:15 PM

MMMMM...now this is tasteful poetry...on many different levels! Wonderfully done Max!

Posted by Kristine Briese on 09/03/03 at 08:18 PM

Wonderful! Such a painting!

Posted by David R Spellman on 09/04/03 at 01:52 PM

Quite a unique and refreshing perspective this is written from. Filled with spectacular images brought about by excellent word choices. I was immediately captivated and enthralled, waiting for the plop of this one upon me... no disappointment there.

Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 09/04/03 at 04:12 PM

An enjoyably crisp and tangy read to steer us towards the upcoming season!

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