| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Max Bouillet on 08/19/03 at 03:50 PM Truly beautiful and heart warming.... until the wicked little twist at the end. Completely unexpected and extremely well crafted. Great read and the purple lip phrase was very vivid! |
| Posted by Kristine Briese on 08/19/03 at 04:11 PM Stopped me cold. Excellent piece. |
| Posted by David R Spellman on 08/20/03 at 02:24 PM I was enraptured by this beautiful scene unfolding before me and thought how special a moment it was and then...! You surely do make an interesting twist at the finale. Great read - well done. |
| Posted by Ashok Sharda on 08/20/03 at 04:23 PM You have captured the scene so beautifully, without as well as within. The last line seems to have emanated from the essence. |
| Posted by Don Coffman on 08/21/03 at 02:31 AM Absolutely stunning. The buildup was gorgeous and the end was definitely a twist. 'Scorpion Tale' is quite apt, and a pretty nifty way to categorize poetry. |
| Posted by JD Clay on 08/22/03 at 10:59 AM Veiled poetry, Graeme. Immediately upon finishing this superbly written piece, I went back and read it again to find what I had missed. This piece really threw me for a loop. Quite effective to say the least, nice work.
Peace... |
| Posted by Quentin S Clingerman on 08/27/03 at 07:03 PM My mind reels! The sudden shift left me shaking my head in disbelief! Here I was ready to write eloquently about your description of young romance! Gothic ending for sure! Well titled series, "Scorpian's Tales". |
| Posted by Quinlan L Gibson on 10/01/03 at 01:10 AM this simply took me. |
| Posted by Alex Smyth on 10/03/03 at 03:20 AM *grinning* (Surely your family and friends do an occasional role call, just to make sure they are all accounted for? lol!) |
| Posted by Jeanne Marie Hoffman on 10/03/03 at 02:47 PM You set this up so well, meaning the ending was a complete shock but after reading the poem, it makes sense ;) You succeeded, I look forward to more of your twisted endings |
| Posted by Michele Schottelkorb on 10/04/03 at 07:39 AM whoa... before i reached the end, i had already formulated my comment in my mind (the usual "what a beautiful precious piece")... then you blew me away with the ending... morbid, yes; dark, yes; outstanding... definately... blessings... |
| Posted by Kate Demeree on 10/05/03 at 02:13 PM I read this thinking awah... how nice another happy ending... only to find the twist at the end... I rather like the twist, and it sparked a bit of that raised eyebrow interest. But honestly... *grin* did you have to give us Scorps another bit of notariety for being not so very understanding? lol seriously well done! |
| Posted by Ginette T Belle on 01/09/04 at 03:05 PM it has this whimisical tone to it...imagery is dazzling.. |
| Posted by Beth K Hannah on 01/28/04 at 03:04 AM the ending came as a suprise. Very good work here...imagery is wonderful. |
| Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 02/24/04 at 12:53 PM Very effective writing Graeme. Superb use of the surprise ending with no hint of what was to come. Thanks again for your kudos on my Eulogy For A Poet. |
| Posted by Quentin S Clingerman on 05/07/04 at 01:41 PM As I read this again I was still a bit shocked by the ending. It is just so unexpected!!! Unwanted, more to the point! LOL! |
| Posted by Alison McKenzie on 05/13/04 at 09:18 PM Yikes. I didn't see it coming AT ALL. All the imagery right up to the line that slayed me....errrr, her.....Wow!!! Where are your other scorpions locked up? |
| Posted by Morgan D Hafele on 02/15/05 at 11:58 AM wow. i love the ending twist. freaking amazing. |
| Posted by Brett Shane on 04/26/05 at 07:44 AM that description put me in the room... with an ending i would have never expected.. awesome. |
| Posted by Traci Mabats on 07/10/05 at 11:25 PM It's like Tom Duley by Poe or something. Chilly. |
| Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 10/08/21 at 03:28 PM Desire overcomes sensibility. Ha! Well done. Fits with this ghoulish month, I think. Congrats on POTD!, wherever you may be. |
