| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by JD Clay on 08/05/03 at 11:59 AM This piece seems to carry like a soft and subtle love song on a spring breeze. Yet the message is firm and hits the mark. Great poetics, Dave.
Peace... |
| Posted by Quentin S Clingerman on 08/05/03 at 02:48 PM Wow! This poem one to be pondered! Wonderful imagery as cast upon the waters in full sail, to move in nautical miles catching in a seine a life full lived and devoted, a rich domain. |
| Posted by Mara Meade on 08/05/03 at 04:34 PM Very few poems leave me in tears... this is one of them. How absolutely beautiful in its expression and sentiment!
(After my first reading of it I thought of the line from Steven Still's Southern Cross... "I'm heading for tomorrow, my dreams are a'dying...but my love is an anchor tied to you, tied with a silver chain.")
Sigh... |
| Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 08/06/03 at 04:57 PM Reading this poem has quite a soothing, calming effect, like being able to walk on that very cloud you talk about. |
| Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 08/06/03 at 04:59 PM PS: Excellent construction/use of vocabulary also! |
| Posted by Brian Francis on 08/07/03 at 03:36 PM As you requested comments in the general forum I have come to read you.
What can I say about this. I simply can not grasp this piece. The first strophe is confusing to me with the irony of "deepest breadth" only adding to the confusion in my mind.
It also contains some rather syllable heavy unnecessary words that seeming only cloud the water (or should I say fog the breeze).
peace -bf |
| Posted by Glenn Currier on 08/17/03 at 07:01 AM I guess the image I liked the best is this one: "and to gently rest as if a holy nimbus,
a halo gracing your mountain shrines." Your poem is both etherial and mind-bending. I read at different levels from verse to verse. Very creative and well done. Outstanding choice of words.
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| Posted by Kate Demeree on 08/19/03 at 04:10 PM It's getting so I repeat myself commenting... There was such a deep sense of awe even reading this, of peace and contentment, yet ever searching. It is a truly beautiful poem. |
| Posted by Kristine Briese on 08/21/03 at 03:05 PM Oh, Dave, this is wonderful! Excellent job of maintaining a consistent descriptive theme. |
| Posted by Charles E Minshall on 08/23/03 at 05:03 AM Awesome!!!Dave....Charlie |
| Posted by Don Coffman on 08/23/03 at 11:12 PM Easy to sail along to and admire the lovely images. So many good comments have been left, so I'll just add this simple praise. |
| Posted by Vimal Rony on 08/27/03 at 08:46 PM What a beauty!Words used wonderfully to communicate ur deep imagery.Great write,David. |
| Posted by Mara Meade on 12/02/03 at 10:57 PM Found it! I just had to put this on my "favourites" list... damned tear-jerker, you! |
| Posted by JD Clay on 06/19/06 at 05:08 AM This one goes beyond, Dave. To call it a love poem would be an understatement. Congratulations of becoming the Poet of The Day.
Pe4ce... |
