| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Agnes Eva on 06/30/03 at 06:58 PM very very imaginative.. . you've got our mind's eyes following their strange flight |
| Posted by JD Clay on 07/01/03 at 11:57 AM Now there is a graphic depiction with a twist. I like the raw emotion captured here and the way you ignite all senses to their fullest extent. Elusive yet provocative, Max. I detect shades of Bukowski and a great title too.
Peace... |
| Posted by Graeme Fielden on 07/01/03 at 01:30 PM nice one Max...very imaginative...with connotations of darkness intricately interwoven within the imagery - well done sir! |
| Posted by Michele Schottelkorb on 07/02/03 at 07:49 PM the images evoked by this poem are both stimulating and repulsive... excellent use of creativity and imagination speaking on a subject that isn't "perfect" or even "beautiful"... your style is intriguing... off to read more... blessings... |
| Posted by Indigo Tempesta on 07/02/03 at 08:10 PM thoughtful. i'll have to consider this one more. can't say i really *enjoy* it, per se, but i really think it's well-written and imaginative and provocative and all those wonderful things. thanks. |
| Posted by Ginette T Belle on 07/02/03 at 11:16 PM what powerful words and phrases you use to paint this vibrant beautiful picture...love this poem |
| Posted by Vimal Rony on 07/02/03 at 11:45 PM Great work,wonderfully expressed. |
| Posted by Charles J Hannan on 07/04/03 at 02:40 AM I have to say this is a wonderfully imaginative piece!...great job Max! |
| Posted by Susan Q Tomas on 07/06/03 at 07:32 PM Fantastic poem. I was rivitting! |
| Posted by Glenn Currier on 07/07/03 at 03:13 AM Images are striking and seed the imagination, methinks I shall never think of it in the same way again. Good work. |
| Posted by Kate Demeree on 07/07/03 at 08:54 PM The poem... has alot of power Max, I agree. This part really stood out in bold letters to me "her husband of the moment
slips off her and into anonymity…
…tiny newborn angels
crawl from the condom
stumbling over shag carpet."
Awesome work!
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| Posted by Brian Francis on 08/01/03 at 09:46 PM Your work impresses me very much.
Thank you
-bf
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| Posted by Quentin S Clingerman on 08/06/03 at 05:01 PM Both vivid and evocative. And shocking! Certainly catches one's attention. An oxymoron kind of poem, as Golau stated it, "drunken lucidity". |
| Posted by Kate Donovan on 08/10/03 at 04:59 PM wow, this is amazing. i always wonder about the unborn, too-- think about the potential if they had been given the chance to be born. i like the way you mentioned that in here. i love this, the imagery is fantastic. |
| Posted by Don Coffman on 08/14/03 at 08:33 AM Whew, so many comments. I'll just sneak in here and say that it's a good read, provided a lot of fuel for thought. |
| Posted by Ginette T Belle on 08/22/03 at 06:35 PM extremely vivid...what a powerful poem... |
| Posted by David R Spellman on 09/17/03 at 12:00 AM With this you were able to capture the loneliness and sometimes ordinary act of sex, leaving nothing of the sanctity of love. While this speaks so much of modern society, it also taunts those of us who try to write, choosing those "imaginary devils" over other "more pleasant" subject matter. Often, it is up to us to expose those things, not so prety, and with this you've done a great job. |
| Posted by H.M Stevens on 12/01/03 at 03:29 AM This poem has an interesting twist in that the blame rests on both sexes rather than the mistep of just one...it harkens to the idea that both man and woman contain the potentiality for human life and that both make conscious choices....although I think I just read this article in the science times that claimed a slight various of otherwise...it is a fasinating debate throughout. |
