Vital Sign by Alastre ZidlerA random caress:
Your hand becomes five needles
To medicate me 06/23/2003 Author's Note: Started as a much longer piece than this but really this is all I want to say I think. Wow I just now realized it's a haiku...
Posted on 06/24/2003 Copyright © 2025 Alastre Zidler
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Posted by Max Bouillet on 06/24/03 at 04:03 PM Compact and vibrant imagery... beautifully written. |
Posted by Agnes Eva on 06/24/03 at 05:03 PM sharp yet soothing. reader thinks ooh pleasant, then oh no ouch, then aha, now it all makes sense :) |
Posted by Graeme Fielden on 06/27/03 at 11:27 AM a smoothe and sensual haiku...a nice surprise when you did a syllable count i imagine! All the best G :) |
Posted by Alison McKenzie on 07/09/04 at 07:32 PM VERY nice!!! (one of my favorite drugs) |
Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 01/20/16 at 05:27 PM Enjoyed this POTD a lot! Thanks! |
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