by Alastre Zidler
A random caress:
Your hand becomes five needles
To medicate me
Author's Note: Started as a much longer piece than this but really this is all I want to say I think. Wow I just now realized it's a haiku...
Posted on 06/24/2003
Copyright © 2022 Alastre Zidler
|Member Comments on this Poem|
|Posted by Max Bouillet on 06/24/03 at 04:03 PM|
Compact and vibrant imagery... beautifully written.
|Posted by Agnes Eva on 06/24/03 at 05:03 PM|
sharp yet soothing. reader thinks ooh pleasant, then oh no ouch, then aha, now it all makes sense :)
|Posted by Graeme Fielden on 06/27/03 at 11:27 AM|
a smoothe and sensual haiku...a nice surprise when you did a syllable count i imagine! All the best G :)
|Posted by Alison McKenzie on 07/09/04 at 07:32 PM|
VERY nice!!! (one of my favorite drugs)
|Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 01/20/16 at 05:27 PM|
Enjoyed this POTD a lot! Thanks!