Vital Sign

by Alastre Zidler

A random caress:
Your hand becomes five needles
To medicate me


Author's Note: Started as a much longer piece than this but really this is all I want to say I think. Wow I just now realized it's a haiku...

Posted on 06/24/2003
Copyright © 2022 Alastre Zidler

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Max Bouillet on 06/24/03 at 04:03 PM

Compact and vibrant imagery... beautifully written.

Posted by Agnes Eva on 06/24/03 at 05:03 PM

sharp yet soothing. reader thinks ooh pleasant, then oh no ouch, then aha, now it all makes sense :)

Posted by Graeme Fielden on 06/27/03 at 11:27 AM

a smoothe and sensual haiku...a nice surprise when you did a syllable count i imagine! All the best G :)

Posted by Alison McKenzie on 07/09/04 at 07:32 PM

VERY nice!!! (one of my favorite drugs)

Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 01/20/16 at 05:27 PM

Enjoyed this POTD a lot! Thanks!

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