Samurai Amidst Cherry Blossoms 1 [End of Swans]
by Alastre Zidler
A kneeling black flower,
Knifing silent mantras through
A rice paper moon.
The whisper-smack of
Steel, watery blue,
An apple-white flash.
Snowy ripples through
A memorial reflection.
In his reddened hands
Strands of shredded silk
Black hair, as if from a mask;
Images of dead birds
Finally pulled from cages.
Strings of bleeding characters,
Spilling out devotion.
Painted with ash
A crawling phoenix
Of red fire.
Author's Note: To be continued. . .
Posted on 05/22/2003
Copyright © 2019 Alastre Zidler
|Member Comments on this Poem|
|Posted by Agnes Eva on 05/22/03 at 06:20 PM|
flows off the tongue, and fills the mind with superceding scenes of color
|Posted by Graeme Fielden on 05/22/03 at 07:56 PM|
Nice One Al!...some great imagery! particularly liked the "crawling phoenix trailing nightmares"...Look forward to more. All the best G.
|Posted by Christina Bruno on 05/26/03 at 04:40 AM|
this is what poetry is ;)
|Posted by Howard F Farewell on 05/27/03 at 07:36 AM|
that...that was....that...wow F'ing sweet
|Posted by Bethany Lee on 05/29/03 at 01:32 AM|
|Posted by Bruce W Niedt on 05/29/03 at 03:01 AM|
Again, vivid yet unsettling imagery - brilliantly done.... d:-)
|Posted by Jennifer L Banks on 06/02/03 at 09:23 AM|
|Posted by Rommel Cruz on 06/15/03 at 03:53 AM|
congratulations for being POTD
|Posted by Anne Howe on 06/15/03 at 04:59 AM|
congratulations on POTD
a rich tapestry of language and atmosphere with a hint of green tea and more than a drop of blood........an excellent read
|Posted by Graeme Fielden on 06/15/03 at 10:07 AM|
Congratulations on POTD Al, it's well deserved!
|Posted by JD Clay on 06/15/03 at 03:44 PM|
Colorful poetry, Alastre. This unique piece is just begging for a sequel. Congratulations on becoming Poet of the Day.
|Posted by Alison McKenzie on 07/15/04 at 08:25 PM|
Definitely unsettling and sad.