Samurai Amidst Cherry Blossoms 1 [End of Swans]

by Alastre Zidler


A kneeling black flower,
Knifing silent mantras through
A rice paper moon.

The whisper-smack of
Steel, watery blue,
An apple-white flash.
Snowy ripples through
A memorial reflection.

In his reddened hands
Strands of shredded silk
Black hair, as if from a mask;
Images of dead birds
Finally pulled from cages.

Strings of bleeding characters,
Spilling out devotion.
Painted with ash
A crawling phoenix
Trailing nightmares
Of red fire.


Author's Note: To be continued. . .

Posted on 05/22/2003
Copyright © 2020 Alastre Zidler

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Agnes Eva on 05/22/03 at 06:20 PM

flows off the tongue, and fills the mind with superceding scenes of color

Posted by Graeme Fielden on 05/22/03 at 07:56 PM

Nice One Al!...some great imagery! particularly liked the "crawling phoenix trailing nightmares"...Look forward to more. All the best G.

Posted by Christina Bruno on 05/26/03 at 04:40 AM

this is what poetry is ;)

Posted by Howard F Farewell on 05/27/03 at 07:36 AM

that...that was....that...wow F'ing sweet

Posted by Bethany Lee on 05/29/03 at 01:32 AM


Posted by Bruce W Niedt on 05/29/03 at 03:01 AM

Again, vivid yet unsettling imagery - brilliantly done.... d:-)

Posted by Jennifer L Banks on 06/02/03 at 09:23 AM

wonderful piece!

Posted by Rommel Cruz on 06/15/03 at 03:53 AM

congratulations for being POTD

Posted by Anne Howe on 06/15/03 at 04:59 AM

congratulations on POTD a rich tapestry of language and atmosphere with a hint of green tea and more than a drop of blood........an excellent read

Posted by Graeme Fielden on 06/15/03 at 10:07 AM

Congratulations on POTD Al, it's well deserved!

Posted by JD Clay on 06/15/03 at 03:44 PM

Colorful poetry, Alastre. This unique piece is just begging for a sequel. Congratulations on becoming Poet of the Day. Peace...

Posted by Alison McKenzie on 07/15/04 at 08:25 PM

Definitely unsettling and sad.

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