|Member Comments on this Poem|
|Posted by Rommel Cruz on 05/17/03 at 01:03 AM|
nice read. welcome to PPS
|Posted by J. P. Davies on 05/17/03 at 08:27 AM|
Welcome to Pathetic...:)
|Posted by Ashok Sharda on 05/18/03 at 11:05 AM|
Imaginative. Reflects the mood and the longing.
|Posted by Melina Raven Maness Diebold on 05/20/03 at 05:38 AM|
Welcome to pathetic! The hands/tears analogy is nice!
|Posted by John Ilotan on 05/23/03 at 04:01 AM|
This is excellent writing. I like the short, clear and very vivid way it is expressed. Nice work.
|Posted by Maryellen Lebeda-Parra on 12/06/03 at 09:18 PM|
i too think that the "short" works well for this.
|Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 04/21/09 at 08:17 PM|
I love that last stanza - can see the hands coming/tearing/pulling down the walls with great emotion.