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Stagnate

by Sarah Brookes

Dog-ended stub of
a stalesmokestack Thursday

Indifferently glowering
out from behind grubby
greased panes, streaked
and stained with salt spray
thrown up from grudging
leaden shores.

Bleary & blurred,
lay me to rest in the soapy
folds of woolly thinking -
drinking murk-muddy
waters of deception as they
awkwardly slop over the
sides of a chipped brown
mug...

Scatter crumbs in
tangled hair
spiders come spin
waxcotten webs
to pull over my eyes

(I'm pondering jigsaws with pieces missing.
Turning skewed circles in the crevices of
grey cells)


Breathing a
Slumbering silence
in which I long for
snores.

01/03/2003

Author's Note: Something written a while back. Submitting to fill voids at the moment. This poem always makes me feel nostalgic.

Posted on 03/12/2003
Copyright © 2024 Sarah Brookes

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Meredith C Hartwell on 03/12/03 at 08:13 PM

Captivating. I might change the repetition of "woolly/wollen" if anything. Welcome to pathetic. : )

Posted by Quentin S Clingerman on 03/12/03 at 08:57 PM

Lots of vivid symbolic imagery for the mind to "play with". You have a feel for words! Welcome to Pathetic.

Posted by Rusty C Arquette on 03/12/03 at 10:33 PM

A wonderful use of the word - Economic, and a taste treat for the eyes and ears that carries me right along with you - Very nice! - More please - Welcome to the fold, Sarah - RCat

Posted by Megan Harvey on 03/13/03 at 05:07 AM

I really like your words choice/combination, specifically "Waxcotten webs." When read outload, the rhythm has a near lulling affect while not losing force.

Posted by Maryellen Lebeda-Parra on 03/22/03 at 04:53 AM

you are amazing! i wish that i had the style you have ... but alas ... i stumple along in my own simplistic way.

Posted by Charles J Hannan on 04/09/03 at 05:00 AM

A new level of thinking...congrates!!

Posted by Christina Bruno on 04/09/03 at 10:58 AM

You are brilliant Sarah, Congrats!

Posted by JD Clay on 04/09/03 at 04:18 PM

You have certainly put the metaphor to good use here, Sarah. Congratulations on becoming Poet of the Day. Peace...

Posted by Lauren Singer on 04/09/03 at 08:58 PM

this is so beautiful.

Posted by Agnes Eva on 05/09/03 at 05:02 PM

you have a way of wordsmithing that really gets at the core of feelings, in a nice abstract association way.. enjoyed this one, especially the opening stanza

Posted by Laura Doom on 05/28/07 at 05:52 PM

Stifling and enervating. Allow me to smother you in appreciation :)

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