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There were thoughts and thoughts
by Ashok Sharda
There were thoughts and thoughts
There were Is and Is
But none could sustain for
More than a while
Though they went on asserting
I am I
There were thoughts and thoughts
There were Is and Is
Pretending, comparing, complaining and fighting
But none ever had a glimpse
That they were naught
In the absence of
An observing I
There were thoughts and thoughts
There were Is and Is
But none came forward to ascertain
If they were alive
After a while.
There were thoughts and thoughts
There were Is and Is
But none of the multitude
Were really
A real I
For want of an
INTENDING I.
03/09/2003 Posted on 03/09/2003
Copyright © 2024 Ashok Sharda
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Adrian Calhoun on 03/09/03 at 02:42 AM There is a lot of thought behind this piece. A lot of behind the scenes statements going on. Good depth and thought provoking. No disrespect intended, but I read it five times through, and the more you read it the faster you can read it, it almost reads like Dr. Seuss, it has that quality to it. |
| Posted by Charles E Minshall on 03/09/03 at 07:03 AM I eyed this and I got a kick out of it. Thought
provoking....Charlie |
| Posted by JD Clay on 03/10/03 at 04:02 AM This amazing piece seems to fold into itself, much like a figure eight. An infinate cycle and quite insightful actually.
Peace... |
| Posted by Anita Mac on 03/11/03 at 01:34 AM Very nice. |
| Posted by Betania Tesch on 03/11/03 at 03:38 PM And just what do you think you're doing, making me read and re-read this when I should be drinking coffee and giggling?! Well, I think many of us are in search of the observing I, but it's a difficult place to reach. One day at a time....
(love) |
| Posted by Britt Zimmerman on 03/12/03 at 05:51 PM very deep! thought provoking, I love it! |
| Posted by Britt Zimmerman on 03/12/03 at 05:51 PM very deep! thought provoking, I love it! |
| Posted by Glenn Currier on 03/13/03 at 04:55 AM This is one of your best, my friend. The repetition is captivating and focus on the vibrating thinking mind and its I... and in the end you raise my inner eye to that INTENDING I. Marvelous work, Ashok. |
| Posted by Jeanne Marie Hoffman on 05/07/03 at 06:02 AM Wow, I really like this. There is a lot of thought behind it. I definately need to reread it at another time. |
| Posted by Agnes Eva on 05/28/03 at 05:47 PM great poem! -i think i see what you mean. if we just passively allow all thoughts to roam, and selves to manifest, then we aren't truly in sync with living. this is how you wake up when you're 80 and say 'where has my life gone?'. so the intention behind all the thoughts and core personality, and attention to the intention of course, are what facilitates being 'alive'. (suggestion; perhaps changing "Were really / a real 'I'" to "Were truly / a real 'I'" to avoid repetition??) |
| Posted by Michele Schottelkorb on 12/31/03 at 09:15 AM 'I' SEE what you are saying... the focus on 'I' is tremendous... for without 'I' there would be no you or he or she or I... thought provoking... blessings... |
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