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Serpenta Ilmaris

by Rommel Cruz

She lays naked
Glistening bronze skin
Painted in gold and silver
Emerald hairs seducing
Petal breaths of lust
Legs long and slender
Eyes dark in mischief
Ensnaring to stare at
But she hisses too much
So I thrust a rusty blade
Thru her cold sinful heart.

12/10/2002

Author's Note: Serpenta Ilmaris is the "Lady of the Sea of Seven Sins". =)
Thanks to all those who suggested a name for this Lady. Anne, Cat, Sebastian, Krissi, Quinn. To those I forgot, Im sorry, I have poor memory.
To all those who "forced" me to write this one (lol), thanks.

Posted on 12/10/2002
Copyright © 2021 Rommel Cruz

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Anne Engelen on 12/10/02 at 01:17 PM

dang rommel...just post the real stuff!!

Posted by Christina Bruno on 12/11/02 at 06:26 AM

last line is the killer hehe

Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 12/11/02 at 02:11 PM

Whoa! Love unexpected endings. You could've just put a bag over her head. That's what I do whenever I make out with a hissing serpenta. ;o)

Posted by JD Clay on 12/12/02 at 05:09 AM

You certainly weild a pen full of power there Rommel. Sharp too. Peace...

Posted by Kate Demeree on 12/12/02 at 02:16 PM

I love the imagry, and unexpectedness of the ending, but it does pose alot of questions in the readers mind. Is there more to this... is this but a beginning or is it the middle of a larger picture?

Posted by Quinn Vokes on 12/13/02 at 02:52 AM

wowwowwow! rommel, this is some great stuff! i agree with all the above...

Posted by David R Spellman on 12/13/02 at 08:42 PM

Great imagery and a mysterious evocative nature. Nicely said.

Posted by Graeme Fielden on 05/15/03 at 03:33 PM

Great poem Rommel...you paint quite a vivid & seductive picture!

Posted by Rachelle Howe on 09/13/06 at 06:14 PM

Wow, that came out of left field. LOL

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