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Paperboat (I cheer for the rain)
by Rommel CruzDark clouds race to cover the sun.
Singing birds swift home to their nests.
Giants weep with their withered leaves.
Lightning writhes, and then thunder screams.
But I cheer. The rain has begun!
Little feet scuttles out of my room.
Clapping hands strip the shirt I've on.
Small eyes whisk a sheet of paper.
Boat's made, laying on a puddle.
And I cheer. My boat braves the storm!
11/10/2002 Author's Note: I just took a trip down memory lane and remembered how I enjoyed paper boats. =) I also had a very hard time writing the second stanza. Im sure you can see the result of that difficulty. My apologies.
Posted on 11/10/2002
Copyright © 2024 Rommel Cruz
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Anne Engelen on 11/11/02 at 07:28 AM Oh I like this picture. You painted it so vividly and took me down to memory lane just with you. I do love the rain at times!!
Nicely expressed!! |
| Posted by Britt Zimmerman on 11/15/02 at 02:39 PM NICE!!! very vivid makes me want it to storm right now, so I can go jump in puddles :)! |
| Posted by Kara Hayostek on 05/06/03 at 05:55 AM This is such a fun poem, great imagery and i love the last line! "My boat braves the storm!"
Way to go !
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| Posted by Melissa Arel on 05/15/03 at 06:38 PM Written with childlike innocence.. :) Wonderful. |
| Posted by JD Clay on 06/18/03 at 12:34 PM Revealing poetry, Rommel. Very introspective.
Peace... |
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