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take this weight please

by Ava Blu

i dont want to i dont want to i dont
want to i dont want to i

i dont want to feel it anymore
and i am too old to bring myself into the sun
and pretend to not be burned by every lie you tell

i dont want to fall for someone else
i dont want to fall for the gimmicks
i dont want to carry burdens that i had when i was ten

but i do

i dont want to
dont want
to want


Posted on 06/30/2022
Copyright © 2023 Ava Blu

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Nadia Gilbert Kent on 06/30/22 at 09:59 PM

Highly relatable, much to my dismay. I like the line breaks. Might be interesting to play with the lines visually, so it's more of a bell curve or a data skew.

Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 07/16/22 at 02:23 AM

Repetition is very effective here. Interesting to see dont without apostrophe. I'm with Nadia - might experiment with a little more fluid feel, especially in S1 and S5.

Posted by Joan Serratelli on 09/16/22 at 09:46 PM

Interesting read- last stanza was GREAT!!

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