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a dance with the dust

by Colleen Sperry

You suddenly appear in the darkest places
Sway in with the slightest breeze
Stagger out with a promise to return

Yet, I have mastered a rhythm
to dash surfaces delightfully clean
because you have no true substance
and I know now your steps are simply fraudulent


Posted on 12/26/2011
Copyright © 2023 Colleen Sperry

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Alison McKenzie on 12/26/11 at 06:38 PM

The biting edge to this effectively removes any traces of wist.

Posted by George Hoerner on 12/26/11 at 07:05 PM

A very nice write lady. I do believe sometimes we fall into someone's life because we 'need' them of they 'need' us. It may be for a short time or a long time but may never be meant for forever.

Posted by Jody Pratt on 12/27/11 at 06:14 AM

There are no ifs, ands or buts about this poem. Very deliberate and effective. Great write.

Posted by Joe Cramer on 12/27/11 at 12:47 PM

... excellent.....

Posted by Laurie Blum on 01/04/12 at 03:23 PM

This is an excellent poem as it has made me stop and think quite a bit. This is really a wonderful poem.

Posted by Elizabeth Jill on 01/07/12 at 03:18 PM

Yes, especially what Jody and Daniel say. This is powerfully expressed, especially that final thunk, damn!

Posted by Joe Cramer on 01/09/12 at 11:08 AM

...congrats on POTD!

Posted by Laurie Blum on 01/09/12 at 01:11 PM

What a great choice for POTD! Congrats my friend!

Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 01/09/12 at 04:36 PM

Loved this POTD! I really like the words "suddenly," "sway", and "stagger" in that first stanza. "to dash surfaces delightfully clean" such a visually strong line.

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