|Member Comments on this Poem|
|Posted by Alison McKenzie on 12/26/11 at 06:38 PM|
The biting edge to this effectively removes any traces of wist.
|Posted by George Hoerner on 12/26/11 at 07:05 PM|
A very nice write lady. I do believe sometimes we fall into someone's life because we 'need' them of they 'need' us. It may be for a short time or a long time but may never be meant for forever.
|Posted by Jody Pratt on 12/27/11 at 06:14 AM|
There are no ifs, ands or buts about this poem. Very deliberate and effective. Great write.
|Posted by Joe Cramer on 12/27/11 at 12:47 PM|
|Posted by Laurie Blum on 01/04/12 at 03:23 PM|
This is an excellent poem as it has made me stop and think quite a bit. This is really a wonderful poem.
|Posted by Elizabeth Jill on 01/07/12 at 03:18 PM|
Yes, especially what Jody and Daniel say. This is powerfully expressed, especially that final thunk, damn!
|Posted by Joe Cramer on 01/09/12 at 11:08 AM|
...congrats on POTD!
|Posted by Laurie Blum on 01/09/12 at 01:11 PM|
What a great choice for POTD! Congrats my friend!
|Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 01/09/12 at 04:36 PM|
Loved this POTD! I really like the words "suddenly," "sway", and "stagger" in that first stanza. "to dash surfaces delightfully clean" such a visually strong line.