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by Laura Doom

The days were drawing in
charcoal, spitting rings
around my eyes, burning toast
between my thighs. The thought
of food dissolved in my stomach
and I turned to midnight, hoping
to find you prostrate on my plate.

Under the table, I found your shoes
tapping tacit distress, a dance of death
that put to shame my ritual remorse.

I tried them on, these instruments
of tactile torture and, out
of the pandemic blue, a world emerged
wholesome; your intimate sphere
of influence under which I staggered
from neon to rainbow, to sway
in the rush of implausible dreams.

At dawn, I wrote the tongue-tied note
a one-line stand, as tribute
to exquisite feet that sacrificed
love's infant steps for one
whose strident grief ran riot
in pursuit of flesh and blood.

Before the choral sun could solmizate
the nascent day, morning had broken
into tears, your kiss of life
a cleansing evocation that uncoiled
my toes and sank my heels.

Beyond crepuscular, the pale of purity
prevails, and by the lightest of shadows
we pirouette in silhouette, playing
poetic parody that pushes polemics
to the conclusion that you will
never suffer the indignity
of being in my shoes.

12/25/2011

Posted on 12/25/2011
Copyright © 2024 Laura Doom

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Charlie Morgan on 12/25/11 at 05:06 PM

...why do i like laura doom? anyone can see. a ringer--carrying wealth and cuteness in one package.

Posted by Rob Littler on 12/25/11 at 09:16 PM

...at dawn, were you still in the shoes...with miles behind you?

Posted by Alison McKenzie on 12/25/11 at 10:16 PM

You are poetry in genius motion. Love love love!!!

Posted by Ulyss Rubey on 12/26/11 at 04:23 AM

sad, clever, and bewilderingly beautiful

Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 12/26/11 at 04:23 PM

More than one line stands me to attention here - on tippy toe, one might say, ready to read your next step. "pirouette in silhouette" - now isn't that a lovely bit of visual. Thank you.

Posted by Joe Cramer on 12/28/11 at 02:49 PM

... excellent... I loved the word choice and useage.....

Posted by Gabriel Ricard on 12/28/11 at 03:04 PM

"Under the table, I found your shoes tapping tacit distress, a dance of death that put to shame my ritual remorse."--Loved this. I really dig the idea of ritual remorse. Intense, wonderful writing, my dear.

Posted by Kristine Briese on 12/30/11 at 05:40 PM

Wonderful management of theme; outstanding imagery.

Posted by Tony Whitaker on 01/01/12 at 09:12 AM

Wow, than God for Google as your wondrous words sometimnes stumped this word man, which is better than a bird man. Excelent word choice, alliteration and flow. Clever poem!

Posted by Lori Blair on 01/04/12 at 12:32 AM

Just most excellent...what more can I say!!! thanks for this...

Posted by Elizabeth Jill on 01/07/12 at 03:15 PM

I am always delightfully humbled by your writing

Posted by LK Barrett on 01/10/12 at 01:23 PM

WOOT!

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