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spaces

by Elizabeth Jill







  
  if i were a cloud
  i would rain
  if i were a storm
  i'd come raging in
  and if i were a good day
  i'd understand
  the spaces between them
  

  if i were a mountain
  i would move
  and if i were an ocean
  i would be low tide
  and if i were a good day
  i'd understand
  the spaces between them



11/11/2011

Author's Note: Written from a long journey of quiet.

Posted on 11/11/2011
Copyright © 2024 Elizabeth Jill

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Mo Couts on 11/11/11 at 06:24 PM

Sometimes those long journeys produce the best works; just like this one =)

Posted by Jim Benz on 11/11/11 at 06:36 PM

Sometimes, though not often, I'll read a poem that hits me right where I live, and at the exact moment when I need to read them. Thank you for posting one of those, Jill.

Posted by Rob Littler on 11/11/11 at 08:30 PM

the wisdom we have now, of the good day...makes me think back to certain images in my memories of those captured stills, of those moments and their impact, making me fully know what you are saying...thanks

Posted by George Hoerner on 11/11/11 at 09:16 PM

A great write m'lady with a great picture. It reminds me of parts of Lake Superior in Michigan's UP. It seems it is the spaces between were we sometimes get lost, at least I do. Thanks!!

Posted by Laura Doom on 11/12/11 at 12:03 PM

you are the spaces between them, which i understand in longing for that quiet...meanwhile, you fill my spaces
x

Posted by Ava Blu on 11/12/11 at 02:47 PM

I love quiet journeys. I typically travel alone though that will be changing now. I crave silence.

Posted by Jo Halliday on 11/13/11 at 08:24 PM

Beautifully written, like heavy drops of rain quenching parched earth's thirst.

Posted by Morgan D Hafele on 11/13/11 at 10:19 PM

if you're not already a good day, it sounds like you're mighty close

Posted by Lori Blair on 11/13/11 at 11:47 PM

and how this has silenced me..touched every part of my inner being..absolutely wonderful!

Posted by Maria Massarella on 11/17/11 at 12:48 AM

I am listening with an eye on the view and am stirred by the want to say something but what prevails is the wonder of sharing the quiet, the silence ...
lovelight*hugs … m.a

Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 11/17/11 at 04:15 PM

We were just watching the other night scientists discuss what exists in all the space in which we co-exist. It was quite remarkable, as is this wise journey you take here. Thank you, Jill.

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