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Concerning Ants

by Dan Linn

May I please explain before I get confused again,
what I meant by choosing ants as allegory.
In comparing ants to pixels, running 'round in circles,
there was clearly technological intent
Then I fantasized, before I realized,
I had switched the ants to people in my story.
In the scatter of my brain, I lost track again,
of what the ants were meant to represent.

Looking at that verse, the rhyme scheme so perverse,
I realized I need eight brand new lines.
I am responsible, but barely capable,
of doing this within constraints of time.
but still I soldier on, all brevity foregone,
my exploration of my previous actions.
I still have not explained, or explanation attained,
and the fault, I know, my dear, is truly mine.

Another verse superfluous, is simply plain ridiculous,
but I suffer from a vain forward momentum.
I have forgotten now, of the ants, when, why, or how,
and simply revel in my wild invention.
Having followed this so far, like me, you surely are,
hoping for a reasonable conclusion.
you clearly must reject, and must not still expect,
I know "ant" about my mind's disintegration.

RoseDrop Rust March 6, 2010

03/06/2010

Author's Note: Intended to be a short apology for previous obscurity, it grew by force of momentum. It was a slow explosion of complexity, it was beyond my ability to restrain.

Posted on 11/01/2011
Copyright © 2024 Dan Linn

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by George Hoerner on 11/01/11 at 12:00 PM

Really cute and wll done!! Welcome to pathetic and keep up the good work.

Posted by LK Barrett on 11/01/11 at 12:02 PM

Enjoy the "meta" verse perspective, looking down from above at the process of creation-the words become the ants! "...everything not compulsory is forbidden..." TH White...this was fun, Dan, ty! ...lk

Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 11/01/11 at 06:29 PM

Your momentum carried me through this very funny, clever word romp. I look forward to what's next. Thank you.

Posted by Morgan D Hafele on 11/13/11 at 08:17 PM

my favorite part is the first stanza. the whole piece is quite a whirlwind.

Posted by Elizabeth Jill on 03/19/12 at 11:29 AM

I found this in LK Barrett's favorites folder, and can see why it's there. I love this dance with ants and all.

Posted by Linda Fuller on 12/08/13 at 03:54 AM

I quite enjoyed this digression with that part of my mind which has not yet disintegrated. Great POTD.

Posted by Laura Doom on 12/31/13 at 09:10 PM

A reflexive exercise that makes me think
small

[is beautiful]

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