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BANG!BANG! (A REWRITE) by Tony WhitakerThe launch of dawn
Clouded gray
Creates this mornings’
Grim delay
Complete
There’s that awful sound
As my baby
Surely
Shot me
Down
So many years
We sailed above
On our sacred
Sea of love
But came a time
I did you wrong
Tried not
but fell
To
Persephone’s
Siren's
Song
Then I sense
some woeful sound
A mourning dove
Has gone aground
A bowman's barb
dropped me down
I see a spreading stain of blood
seems to surprise
my one true love
I'm so sorry for
This thing
I’ve done
Then I hear
Again that gun
A click
And then
That awful sound
As my baby
Surely
Shot me
Down
10/09/2011
Author's Note: I went back and reread the poem I posted yesterday and hated it. There was just a lot wrong with it. So I have rewritten it and now it conveys the meter and meaning.
Posted on 10/09/2011 Copyright © 2026 Tony Whitaker
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