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My Hermit The Brother

by Amy Manning

tallpalelankyvolatile
driftingscreamingsoftguitar
quietdeepvoice
never leaving the confines of his head
eating just to stay alive
an 18 year old intake of breath
pleaseletmebethereontheexhale
to feel a reality that is
even more true than
this
one

09/27/2011

Posted on 09/27/2011
Copyright © 2024 Amy Manning

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by E. A. Pugh on 09/27/11 at 10:52 PM

Great title and picture of a male teen.

Posted by Elizabeth Jill on 09/30/11 at 10:36 PM

You got it down fantastically accurate!

Posted by Laura Doom on 10/01/11 at 11:23 AM

A title bite than turns sweet, and a body that animates the head in my hands -- when I expire, this will be my favourite epitaph...

Posted by Ken Harnisch on 10/04/11 at 12:42 PM

the image you've put down here,Amy, reminds this man of the teen he once was...sterling work!

Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 10/04/11 at 02:35 PM

Tightly vivid structure. I like this a lot.

Posted by George Hoerner on 10/31/11 at 11:05 AM

This is so very well done and certainly deserves POTD as it is today.

Posted by E. A. Pugh on 10/31/11 at 08:49 PM

:)

Posted by Laura Doom on 11/01/11 at 10:10 AM

potd quake -- it was only a question of when...

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