| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Joe Cramer on 09/18/11 at 05:22 PM ... excellent.. welcome to Pathetic..... |
| Posted by Gabriel Ricard on 09/18/11 at 11:14 PM Sometimes indeed. Dug this a lot. |
| Posted by Quentin S Clingerman on 09/20/11 at 07:09 PM One rubs sticks together to make a fire. Rubbing hands together maybe for warmth. Rubbing brain cells together to come up with a poem. Sometimes it happens! |
| Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 09/21/11 at 10:02 PM Love the clever alliteration in that last stanza. The whole thing pretty good. |
| Posted by JD Clay on 09/29/11 at 12:12 AM Interesting use of trope, Dave. Me likes! |
| Posted by Charlie Morgan on 09/29/11 at 04:07 PM ...easy to dance to also; a really cool piece of work. |
| Posted by Tony Whitaker on 09/30/11 at 10:53 PM Love the use of trope.Keeps me thinking! |
| Posted by Alison McKenzie on 10/03/11 at 05:08 AM Heh. Definitely a stretch, but not a topple. :) |
| Posted by Jody Pratt on 01/18/12 at 07:29 AM I particularly love the first three stanzas. Really great poem! |
