| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by E. A. Pugh on 01/10/11 at 07:12 PM You captured the heart of the lap dancer and the the subject of heels. This is where your write entered the often sung “I promise to never ask you for anything ever again.
Extending me the same courtesy is only fair” I could think of many well known songs with the same promise of nothing for that $#%@ or purl wearing woman girl, just disrespectful on all sides. The man in the tale “ every night
to drive you to the hospitable” then these words rock and shock “after you break off
twelve sharp fingernails in the poor bastard’s eyes. Nice, very interesting voice of a “slim-to-none repeat of what happened last time” relationship. |
| Posted by Charlie Morgan on 01/11/11 at 12:10 AM ..your notes. that's all i need is your notes...it's like a whoops[section] on dirt track...a ride of its own. |
| Posted by Morgan D Hafele on 01/11/11 at 01:13 PM but the courtesy is rarely returned... at least in my experience. haha |
| Posted by Scott Utley on 01/12/11 at 02:00 AM "I know all about those places
that are supposedly one-third Southern Baptist,
one-third doomsday Catholic and one-third
Hallucinogenic Monster Mash."
And I laughed and I laughed and I laughed and I love it! I love it! |
| Posted by Tony Whitaker on 01/14/11 at 08:33 AM Man, you can really dig out a trip! I just love your styff dude! Where do you get all these ideas?? Anothetr Brilliant one for me fave bin! |
| Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 01/15/11 at 02:04 AM Excellent expression and imagery throughout Gabriel. If I ever get rich enough to travel to the States, I'll definitely want to check out Wild Bill Boulevard. I especially like how one hour extends to sixty years in a single page of writing.
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| Posted by Jody Pratt on 01/16/11 at 04:48 AM Brilliant, Outstanding, Vivid, Memorable... it's poems like this that make it hard to give other poems the same rating. I especially like the stanza about the funeral dress. |
| Posted by Laurie Blum on 01/16/11 at 05:08 PM Another stellar piece that reminds me why I love to read the wildly unique Mr. Ricard! Great work here. |
| Posted by W. Mahlon Purdin on 01/22/11 at 02:13 PM I love this stanza:
It’s fine with me if you want to put on
your best funeral dress, your finest dancing heels
and act surprised
when you walk into the room and become
the tragic center of attention.
...and the whole poem was really rewarding and honest, raw in the right ways, alive, humorous subtleties with just-the-right tone.
Makes me want to dive into the rest of your library. |
| Posted by Andrea Colton on 01/29/11 at 07:43 PM This is like a short story almost. The scene you create and your attention to detail is just awesome. Great way to describe a roller coaster, semi-psychotic relationship...I've had plenty of those lol |
| Posted by Meghan Helmich on 12/02/11 at 09:00 PM I think this is in my top 3 favorites of yours. |
