| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Steve Michaels on 11/07/10 at 01:27 AM This is super-tasty:
i crawled like a rumor
all low out the back
with a dead man's dream
and a long list of names. |
| Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 11/07/10 at 02:00 AM Excellent. I enjoyed this. |
| Posted by Charlie Morgan on 11/07/10 at 06:30 PM ...vince, what steve and kristina said and and and...you know, love the start'N'go effect. |
| Posted by Gregory O'Neill on 11/08/10 at 07:20 PM Nice Vince, Like it all, but that first stanza is killer....the "crawled like a rumor"...et al., wow. Fav for me alrighty. Delighted. Thanks. |
| Posted by Laura Doom on 11/09/10 at 11:32 AM The 'little girl lost' passage of writes elevates this above clipboard status, for me anyway.
A query -- I don't see the 'Barter System' joint venture in your collection(?); I guess you have reasons (altruism considered), but just to say that it would have gathered positives from me, if I'd found it here :> |
| Posted by Anita Mac on 11/09/10 at 07:42 PM Between "not waiting for shouts
to bleed out on the floor,
i crawled like a rumor" and the last stanza... Brilliant phrases. I'm not sure this is in the right folder, just saying. |
| Posted by Therese Elaine on 11/10/10 at 03:57 AM Oh sugar...this is one of your finest pieces...so much so it almost hurts to read, hurts to comprehend but all in all, it's still you, still echoing with that essence that is an inherently talented testimonial...kick me if I ever wait too long to read something this good. |
| Posted by George Hoerner on 11/10/10 at 09:12 PM Really nice write Vince. I missed it early on as I was in FL for a long weekend at a wedding thing for my son. It very well done. |
| Posted by Tony Whitaker on 11/12/10 at 01:07 PM Been away awhile and this is the first poem I read. What a frieght train of cruel rails. My favorite line"...and i'll let scorched earth
become common ground." Hell will one day greet those that tempt Her! Brilliant piece Vince.
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| Posted by James Zealy on 11/12/10 at 10:08 PM Very well written and fun to read |
| Posted by Peggie Eng on 11/15/10 at 02:39 AM Mindbending.. when is this being published?
Adding to my faves you are replacing Poe.. |
| Posted by Clara Mae Gregory on 11/17/10 at 01:51 AM SORRY I've been a little slow to getting around to read this.....seriously, you should publish...your work is very good. I enjoyed reading this too (very much) |
| Posted by Kimberly Bauer on 12/30/10 at 02:01 AM Wow.
She wanted to trade her diamonds for smoke and I helped her do it." really reminds me of myself... this poem is artfully done.
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| Posted by Jody Pratt on 01/15/12 at 08:27 AM Superb Vince, superb. |
