by Kristina Woodhill

we have written
two days past
your deadline

our scribbles
like ants scurrying,
or little cars
speeding along

this electric race track,
bent on making
the perfect curve,

while you simply up swept
a gracefully executed "l"

for leaving and left
in quick succession;

stubbornly we keep prying
at the period

behind your last sentence,
praying it is a push pin

easily removed,
to press in much further

down our imagined
story line

when we are more ready
to read

your last act


Posted on 10/05/2010
Copyright © 2019 Kristina Woodhill

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Gabriel Ricard on 10/05/10 at 08:53 PM

Beautiful as all kinds of hell. What else can I say?

Posted by A. Paige White on 10/05/10 at 11:56 PM

Gotta agree with Gabe.
"stubbornly we keep prying at the period behind your last sentence," WOW
that particularly grabs my imagination definitely in regards to writings... and could apply to a jail term for a beloved. Fantastic writing!

Posted by Therese Elaine on 10/06/10 at 02:15 PM

Kristina, this is really a wonderful bit of no-last-minute-reprieve declaration, sharp without being too harsh, precise without losing emotive quality, and it flows seamlessly from beginning to end. Just fantastic!

Posted by Quentin S Clingerman on 10/12/10 at 08:27 PM

Surely "grabs the imagination"! More than writing deadline (which I think is symbolic here), ones own life experience could be well applied.

Posted by June Labyzon on 10/29/10 at 11:03 AM

Though it may have been about a writing deadline, I did not get that at all...for me it resonated as the deadline of ending a relationship long past it's point of renewal..at least that's where I am now, so this piece served that purpose for me....great read, Kristine

Posted by Timothy Wilson on 01/11/11 at 05:19 AM

Beautiful. Inspiring. Captivating. cool

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