| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by V. Blake on 09/28/10 at 04:47 AM This is wonderfully sharp--there's a cool viciousness to it. And you found the best line you could have used to conclude it. |
| Posted by Jim Moore on 09/28/10 at 12:40 PM This is a wonderful piece Mel, as are the three other poems of yours I read. Fresh, concise, and with a lasting impression.
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| Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 09/29/10 at 01:32 AM I do like how you deliver this with both thought and action. The grass image is so primal. Great ending. |
| Posted by Steven Kenworthy on 09/30/10 at 10:19 PM your writing comes from somewhere i'd like to go. you're maybe one of the most mysterious writers on here and definitely one of the best. make it happen more often yeah? excellence. :) |
| Posted by George Hoerner on 10/01/10 at 12:36 PM A nice write and I love the picture of you and the baby!! |
| Posted by Alli Martel on 04/16/11 at 02:05 PM This poem is absolutely beautiful. The ending is perfect. Congrats on the POTD! |
| Posted by James Blaylock on 04/16/11 at 11:10 PM Worrisome at best. We often ponder on the 'what ifs' and it never gets us anywhere but more tired than we were before. Great write and congrats! |
| Posted by Mo Couts on 07/24/11 at 08:52 PM This is beautiful and sad all at once. |
| Posted by Ava Blu on 07/25/11 at 02:24 AM I love everything about this. Come back and write more. |
| Posted by Paul Marino on 10/25/19 at 04:14 AM yes |
