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The Daydreamer's Atlas

by V. Blake

(here, we move like music from foreign countries--
waltzing as baritones, meandering casually
through languages that we don't speak,
listening to a black-and-white earshot
become something less abstract
as its outlines are rectified;
its negative spaces filled with color,
by what might be lyrics embedded in radio waves,
or emigrants from faraway lands and disinterested parties.
these diplomats embrace our bastardized sing-alongs,
doubtlessly seeing them for the mash of heartfelt gibberish
that we know them in our throats to be...
imperfect, and hopefully less callous than chorus.
)

of course,
we liked to think we'd have done as much for them,
if our guttural hymns ever traced back the same routes
in the opposite direction.
but then we found ourselves fused to one another,
and to the systematically crumbling architecture
that identified everything west of the waking life meridian
in moments like what we imagined this one to be.
we knew that the way back was whichever way we chose,
but it was the postponement of decisions
that brought us there in the first place.

we always said it would be better
to be a whisper in the slipstream,
than a scream on the stopwatch,
but we knew that we couldn't stay there forever,
and that kids can't raise themselves.

(and yet...

09/24/2010

Posted on 09/24/2010
Copyright © 2024 V. Blake

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Jim Benz on 09/24/10 at 09:57 PM

waking life ... a whisper in the slipstream ... forever. [nice]

Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 09/25/10 at 01:39 AM

Great title - love the use of "Atlas" and that first line is so strong. This is smooth as silk in its flow. Love that last stanza. Thank you.

Posted by Frankie Sanchez on 09/25/10 at 02:07 AM

"that we know them in our throats to be..." love this. completely.

Posted by Paul Lastovica on 09/25/10 at 05:50 AM

an eternal question springs to mind after "and yet..." and that is this : Where do we go from here? This is meaty, and delicious; and I will chew until my jaws can take no more.

Posted by Charlie Morgan on 09/25/10 at 11:18 PM

...this is more than i can talk about; i was out of breath, but trying to hang on...envy goin-on over here.

Posted by George Hoerner on 09/30/10 at 03:49 PM

I obviously missed this one. Really well done Vince. Great flow and direction! And yet you leave the direction for the reader...

Posted by Elizabeth Jill on 09/30/10 at 09:47 PM

Vince, wherever your mind finds these metaphors ("scream on the stopwatch" et al)? Keep kayaking there!

Posted by Ken Harnisch on 09/30/10 at 10:28 PM

There's an artery clogging richness to this poem which demands it be savored, not gulped. And so I have, three times already, and I'm coming back for more, dipping fingers and spoons into lines as rich as I ever read in this universe, Vince

Posted by Colleen Sperry on 10/01/10 at 02:58 PM

I enjoyed this write Vince

Posted by Therese Elaine on 10/06/10 at 04:26 AM

Metaphysical caramel and chromatic indulgence...this is pure yumminess for the grey matter and worthy of a Vangelis track behind it.

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