I really enjoy this sort of "moving" poetry, how it dances on the page...the first stanza is very strong visually in relation to it's content, and the breaks and spacing really work with it...the second stanza too works well, but I think I was halted by the capitalized "Fail"--I do realize it is meant to have some emphasis, but for what it is worth, I naturally first read "fall" instead...nevertheless, either would make your point, and there is a certain amount of punch that comes with your version ;P kudos on a crisp little poem that we can all relate to in some form or fashion :) I hope I have not offended in any way, peace n poems to u, jewels

The satisfying sound of perspectives delivered by meiosis -- certainly not a miscarriage of poetic justice...

You always bring a bit of style that I don't find anywhere else to these images of yours. This one is wonderful.

...anita, a delightfully stylistic pome...i love the conepts of icicles, and the falling [tinkling] cool, nita, cool. brrrr.

it's funny because last night i wrote a piece in my journal that included a broken falling as well. this is much better than what i wrote though.

Your last stanza is breathtaking.

Great to see this as POTD! Congrats!