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unfinished

by Mary Frances Spencer

death aneurism
just finished his portfolio
girlfriend and 7 year old son
found him on floor

mail unopened
grudges unresolved
work pending

no time left
to tie the
loose unlaced
cinch that deal
smell the roses

gravity swift
he dropped

whatever he was doing

fell into
forever after

01/26/2010

Author's Note: Someone we know passed suddenly and unexpectedly. It kind of makes you realize how precious life is and maybe it wouldn't hurt to forgive, move forward in each moment with positivity and purpose. Namaste MFS

Posted on 01/27/2010
Copyright © 2022 Mary Frances Spencer

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by George Hoerner on 01/27/10 at 12:51 PM

Very nice write MFS. 'Grudges unresolved', wow how we never seem to have the time till we none. And I standing on the banana peel.

Posted by Gabriel Ricard on 01/27/10 at 02:57 PM

Sounds good to me. Fine work.

Posted by Therese Elaine on 01/27/10 at 06:46 PM

I think you managed a really fitting tribute to the suddenness of passing and the strange twists in life...very good work here.

Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 01/27/10 at 08:53 PM

The short lines to this give me the abruptness of his demise - very effective. I like the phrase "gravity swift" very much, and those last two lines make me think of a fairy tale, but with a real death ending. Thank you, and I'm sorry for your loss.

Posted by Joe Cramer on 01/27/10 at 10:10 PM

... exceptional.....

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