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Blossoming
by Julie Adams
It is his name that means blossoming,
yet I'm the flourishing flower in his gentle light.
Most commonly noted, he's a supporter, an ally,
perhaps that is how he scaled my protective garden wall.
Rumi says much about the wonder of the sea current,
the strong wind, how love carries us along;
I wonder if this buoyancy could be the same
tenderness to which he refers. Am I the ruby,
is he the sunlight, bright and apparent before me;
does he manifest this as his name also suggests.
I wonder at the flowing I feel, the fish in me
that swims like a fry new to the water.
How long can I swim against the rushing current;
I am no salmon.
I wonder at the heights I feel, the stork in me
crossing the sky, gliding into warm air.
How mad can I be to fly against the imposing wind;
I am no swift.
He is part of me now, perhaps he's been there
all along; waiting patiently for me to look and see,
like a mirror, all I ever wanted reflected back;
His light to my ruby soul, his love to my desire.
My heart slowly opens in his hand, a gentle petal.
My lips give way to his kiss, a moment blossoms.
01/23/2010 Posted on 01/23/2010
Copyright © 2024 Julie Adams
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Joe Cramer on 01/23/10 at 10:30 PM ... the word choice and flow are quite exceptional Jewels..... |
| Posted by Michael Smith on 01/23/10 at 10:37 PM Julie, this is a beautiful ode; it is not short of imagery nor evocative language.
Technical comments (since you solicited):
- 4th line: typo "his" vs. "is"
- I would've lined it differently, but this form has its own positives is still very effective.
- You've punctuated this very well, though, at least once I thought you were asking a question and I was expecting a question mark.
No matter how you slice it, Julie, this is a very good write and a very enjoyable read. Thank you very much for sharing :)
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| Posted by Rachel Bennett on 01/24/10 at 04:57 AM "how mad can I be to fly against the imposing wind,
I am no summer swift"...This is beautiful, Julie! It's very intimately written; thank you for sharing! |
| Posted by George Hoerner on 01/25/10 at 02:32 PM Light just reflects the beauty of ruby in you lady. You are what really shines. Very nice write. |
| Posted by Sandy M. Humphrey on 01/26/10 at 11:19 PM You ask questions yet provide answers, beautiful metaphors, amazing emotion. smh |
| Posted by Clara Mae Gregory on 01/27/10 at 02:12 AM ~Exquisite, Jewels! |
| Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 01/27/10 at 05:49 PM The gentleness to this introduces the magic I feel when watching the progression of a flower blooming over the course of several days. I appreciate the reference to Rumi and the stream, the ruby and the sunlight - really some lovely ideas playing off each other here. I can't think of a more perfect last two lines. |
| Posted by Scott Utley on 01/27/10 at 08:50 PM Shams of Tabriz is dancing over Rumi's rainbow ... beautiful work proud of it's gentle soul ... |
| Posted by Amie Golda on 01/28/10 at 02:00 AM You've got some beautiful imagery here, Julie. And rachel stole my favorite line! I envy it, I envy you! Wonderful wonderful write. |
| Posted by Joan Serratelli on 01/28/10 at 06:14 PM Beautiful- the last 2 lines took my breathe away. OUTSTANDING! Thank you- a lovely read, |
| Posted by A. Paige White on 01/28/10 at 09:26 PM Beautifully stated yearnings, Jewels. Let my sigh echo Kristina's. Absolutely a ravishing blossom from the key strokes of your mind and hands. |
| Posted by Therese Elaine on 01/28/10 at 10:09 PM Few people can master the art of a tribute so well and so creatively...it is impossible to deny the depth of affection and care that went into this piece and for that reason along with all others, it is a wonderful thing you have shared with us. |
| Posted by V. Blake on 01/28/10 at 11:16 PM If ever a poem deserved the top spot, this would be it. Wonderful work, Julie! |
| Posted by Steven Kenworthy on 01/29/10 at 12:22 AM this reminds me of a fabio book cover...and not in a bad way. in an epitome of romance way. i could never write anything this gushy and pretty...so i give you massive love. this is sweet...plenty of yummy visuals and so forth...the flying, the flowers...ooh la. |
| Posted by Laurie Blum on 02/01/10 at 04:33 PM Lusciously romantic and seductive. I like. ~ LB |
| Posted by Alison McKenzie on 02/19/10 at 06:50 PM I definitely see the similarities to how we see things, Jules. I particular like the ruby metaphor, in so many facets of it!!! And I like, "I'm no salmon." |
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