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Snowblind
by V. Blakebolstered by the cavalry of a tailwind,
the nation of snow on my roof
is executing a series of maneuvers
which can best be described
as an act of guerrilla warfare.
and though not for lack of trying,
i cannot seem to understand
the animosity it appears to feel
for the nation of snow in my yard. 01/02/2010 Author's Note: Poemuary entry #2
Posted on 01/03/2010
Copyright © 2024 V. Blake
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by George Hoerner on 01/03/10 at 01:43 PM Like nations bordering on each other, roofs and yards do not always get along. They each speak a different language and it seems never to be the language of peace. Good write sir. |
| Posted by Gregory O'Neill on 01/03/10 at 10:32 PM Wish I'd said it,but e.e. cummings did: "The snow doesn't give a soft white damn whom it touches." Seems you are near a similar wavelength. Thanks. |
| Posted by Charlie Morgan on 01/04/10 at 02:20 AM ...cool: cavalry, tailwind, nation of snow, wait. the whole, entire pome[sic] is stupendous...don't you hate it when peeps say you write like...yada yada...well, you write like a bunch of folks and here you write like garth hill and gabriel ricard...and i've seen garth's writing for 20 years, gabes probably only 4...but boy you good, unkay? you can whip those metaphors like Lash LaRue can snap a bull whip. |
| Posted by Rachel Bennett on 01/04/10 at 04:33 AM I considered writing about snow yesterday too - you did better than I would have, anyway. Nice work! |
| Posted by Michael Smith on 01/04/10 at 07:01 AM I like this extended, exaggerated description of potential energy. I love the attitude exhibited in much of your work, Charlie. Thanks for sharing, and good luck on your challenge this month! |
| Posted by Michael Smith on 01/04/10 at 07:02 AM My apologies, VINCE, for calling you Charlie a moment ago =P |
| Posted by Elizabeth Jill on 01/05/10 at 02:24 AM i n c r e d i b l e |
| Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 01/05/10 at 02:35 AM So clever these two nations. Your observations are fresh, thoughtful, and compelling. Thank you. |
| Posted by Amie Golda on 01/08/10 at 02:50 AM That last comment by Noe made me laugh. But you do continue to dominate the top rated effortlessly as you do well here. I like the imagery you used here. Creatively put most definitely. |
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