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Crimson Sky

by Jose Feliciano

Pure skies are shattered,
Demons torment and fly.
Like a crow in the red night,
I fly into the crimson Sky.

10/29/2009

Posted on 10/29/2009
Copyright © 2024 Jose Feliciano

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Jo Halliday on 10/29/09 at 05:38 PM

I love the imagery; however I would try to avoid repetitions, like "fly" or "red/crimson". It lessens the force of an otherwise excellent power-packed poem. The opening line is remarkable; a great promise here. Welcome to Pathetic!

Posted by Joe Cramer on 10/29/09 at 10:14 PM

... I'm with Jo, such wonderful imagery..... welcome to Pathetic.....

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