autumn tanka (song of summer)

by Jim Benz

to the wind
rustling in the lilac leaves
I spoke your name
but autumn interrupted
and the sky turned cold


Posted on 10/03/2009
Copyright © 2024 Jim Benz

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Clara Mae Gregory on 10/04/09 at 12:39 PM

I find this to be beautifully stunning, Jim. I am definately saving this one! Loved it!

Posted by Kathleen Wilson on 10/09/09 at 07:16 AM

Beautifully subtle, the speaking, and the interruption. Love the delicacy of this, in a form (tanka) I have come to love.

Posted by Laurie Blum on 10/09/09 at 01:33 PM

This is so lovely... I know this moment.

Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 10/10/09 at 01:01 AM

Such a fine touch to this. Thank you.

Posted by A. Paige White on 10/11/09 at 05:51 PM

This brought me sighs of longing. I keep stepping out hoping for just such song and find only sighs among the boughs. Lovely.

Posted by Tony Whitaker on 10/12/09 at 06:05 AM

You wrote a Tanka in its true meaning! Very well done as I love the art form of the Ku and Tanka!

Posted by Sandy M. Humphrey on 10/12/09 at 10:07 PM

seasonal longing with each word, line and sigh. smh

Posted by William Brunk on 10/13/09 at 11:06 PM

gorgeous imagery. great write

Posted by Julie Adams on 10/19/09 at 03:34 PM

beautiful seasonal piece...so much said and left unsaid, well done, peace, jewels

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