Man. I haven't read your stuff in awhile but instantly reminded me why I love it. Your use of language, and the mechanics of it is so cool, especially that first stanza

this poem is like defining cool. the brevity here makes for sharper edges i think. the twentieth-twentyfirst century line stands out above the crowd for sure. this has your style, but has broader strokes. it's excellent though...it is a child of your wit and artistry for sure. it feels like a windy day on top of a car crash but in a good way...or does that even make sense? no matter what, i like it and i'm going to read it a bunch of times to make sure i suck all the juice out of it. strong times my friend. honored.

great flow to this piece

Frankie, man, you've made me feel foreign in my own skin. Your flow here is begging to be performed. Go slam this somewhere! I particularly like your omission of "the" in the title and throughout; it adds something by taking away, emboldening the imagery. Absolutely a favorite.