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closed eyes fathom too much

by Ava Blu


when I can’t concentrate, I begin breathing differently
something heaves in a way only birds can hear and the wind seems to be twirling around my lungs
it’s some type of panic attack, I assume, and I seem to never have help around
[but I wouldn’t want it]
it’s as if you are dead with your eyes open, the scent of the dirt and grass is upon your breath
and you no longer wish to be closed
this is when I know a love that only exists in Nature and I never mind not being able to see.

03/16/2009

Posted on 03/16/2009
Copyright © 2024 Ava Blu

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Gabriel Ricard on 03/16/09 at 02:21 PM

I really like where this goes. It seems to take us through a few hundred different places before settling on that really, really beautiful last stanza. Gorgeous and quietly brilliant.

Posted by Kristi Paik on 03/17/09 at 03:56 PM

wonderful and interesting write. i was thinking it was going to lead to one place but then turned into something entirely different. thanks for sharing it.

Posted by Anita Mac on 03/17/09 at 07:05 PM

I know this feeling. I love your transition from the first half to the second. :o)

Posted by Tom Goss on 03/18/09 at 05:53 PM

The bittersweet breathing of an autumn leaf on a tree that somehow knows it is merely a leaf and must be content to gently flutter downward, downward.

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