subzero blues or all in favor of early spring...
by Rhyana Fisher
got more mileage to our dollar
when we duct taped up its tears
from stretchin' even tighter
over window seams and cracks.
while wind rattles our poor trailer
and cold slips 'round bolted doors
pennies beeline for the registers
and wing past our turned backs.
at times i get to envyin'
our furry coated kittens
i'm curious (just wonderin')
how many socks and mittens...
right, i really didn't say that we'll pretend.
just as well we've got our friends,
maybe friendly fam as well
turn the furnace down to 40
and we'll go visitin'.
(that don't make the plants too happy
but they'd best be plenty hardy,
cuz if mild frostbite kills'm
they're as doomed as doom can get.)
despite all we're still kickin'
gas keeps on a-heatin'
tho those bills are pilin' up
can't afford much food to cook
but thin as sticks is in
no need for dietin'
at least my mind is full
weren't meant to live on bread alone, y'know.
still got my sense of humor
the hubby and two brats...err, cats
we'll manage (so we hope)
to keep each other warm
and if spring ain't just a rumor
it best get here in a rush.
Author's Note: still a rough draft, altho i fixed the most obvious bugs. yes, i played fast and loose with grammar. i'm aware ain't ain't a word. :p feel free to criticize all else.
Posted on 02/01/2009
Copyright © 2020 Rhyana Fisher
|Member Comments on this Poem|
|Posted by Vikki Owens on 02/01/09 at 05:36 PM|
i love the grammar! love the stanza about pennies. wonderful write. keep warm ;)
|Posted by Gabriel Ricard on 02/01/09 at 06:13 PM|
I wouldn't dream of it. What works works, right? And I really like this.
|Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 02/02/09 at 04:48 AM|
A light touch to an increasingly serious condition - the language was fun, the kittens an added treat. Here's to hanging on to that sense of humor.
|Posted by Julie Adams on 01/29/10 at 10:22 AM|
this is my first reading of your work and I just love the humor slivered into this piece, delightful...the thought patterns feel fresh and alive, the imagery playful and selective, and the persona of the narrator has such a colorful mind and creative flow of ideas with wit to match...loving the momentum it picks up, a pleasure to read you...peace, jewels