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Crackling
by Alison McKenzieIt was ultra-late as I
Climbed into bed.
I was dizzy-tired
You know, feeling drunk, only not;
Glad to be done for the day.
As I drifted into a dream
About beaches, and my man,
Being thin and playing Frisbee,
Delighted with my flat stomach,
Taut thighs and gurgling energy,
There was a sudden sensation
Of crackling inside my head,
Followed immediately by the flash
Of an entirely unrelated scene
From someone elses life.
Now, what do you make of that?
Cheated, that's what I say.
Well, so far anyway.
01/22/2009 Author's Note: True story. It went on for about 45 minutes before I was finally allowed to have my dream on the beach.
Posted on 01/22/2009
Copyright © 2024 Alison McKenzie
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Sandy M. Humphrey on 01/22/09 at 06:33 PM I love the word play in the first stanza, you made me feel the tired and yes it is cheated when what you want to dream is replaced by mind tricks. Love it . smh |
| Posted by A. Paige White on 01/22/09 at 07:30 PM Ha! That is funny. I had a somewhat disturbing (an old boyfriend that had a fatal heart attack - year younger than me! talk about disturbing!) and my current feller getting into a fist fight, dream last night and surprisingly, you put in a cameo appearance in it. Couldn't go back to sleep til I wrote it out... Dreams... You did a great job describing it and your frustrations with it, lol. |
| Posted by Elizabeth Jill on 01/22/09 at 11:22 PM I want to finally go be a beach bum and dream on the beach. I felt I was dreaming right alongside you, except frisbees freak me out if they're zizzing around me without me playing too. |
| Posted by Elizabeth Jill on 01/22/09 at 11:26 PM Raphael (the Angel) has been considered to enter into dreams to foretell the future...(hence, the homeless angel in "Grand Canyon" who whispers to the child rescuer, "Keep the child.") Keep this in mind, oh Poet ;) |
| Posted by Gabriel Ricard on 01/23/09 at 12:52 AM I really like that first stanza. It does a great job setting the stage. |
| Posted by Ken Harnisch on 01/23/09 at 01:35 PM Been there in somebody else's dream, and them in mine when all i wanted was to get lost in something more mellow and personal...hope it didn't intrude on a lovely tan! |
| Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 01/23/09 at 04:01 PM Ha! Someone in your air waves. I like this a lot! |
| Posted by Charlie Morgan on 01/26/09 at 06:15 PM ...hey, be careful of being in someone else's dream, there may be a rent-due coming at you...you are all the things you hope for: friends galore, and love from those friends and young 'uns...good write of your pathos... |
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