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Moments in the night
by Keith D AllisonTrying fill the time
waiting to die
Some time I feel
so alone
it would be nice
to have someone to hold
Trying fill the time
waiting to die
I think too much
but I feel the pain close to my heart
maybe it will go away
maybe I should go
to the emergency room
Trying fill the time
waiting to die
No need to tremble
no need to cry
it's all a part of life's journey
still I wish that the moon dance in my eye
Sometimes it's sad growing old
sometimes it's sad to be alone
No need to tremble
no need to cry
But in the silence of the night
I shall whispered goodnight
but there's no one to hear
No need to tremble
no need to cry
hope to see
the morning light 10/23/2008 Posted on 10/24/2008
Copyright © 2024 Keith D Allison
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Gabriel Ricard on 10/24/08 at 04:35 AM This almost reads like a prayer of some kind. I really like that. |
| Posted by Gregory O'Neill on 10/24/08 at 08:23 AM True there may be no need for some of these emotions, but they are what makes us...us. The are a natural part of that journey. None of us spend enough time preparing to die...it remains pretty low of the list of "things to do". I appreciate this though. And its voice is clear and confidenr. Thanks. |
| Posted by George Hoerner on 10/24/08 at 12:55 PM Nice write. Is it the darkness that brings those moments? Or is it the lonliness inside that makes us feel them? We are all headed in the same direction, some sooner, some later. But at the end there we are, no escape. We just take one step at a time, though some of us run. Let's hope we take the best step we can. |
| Posted by Mary Frances Spencer on 10/24/08 at 04:31 PM This reads like a Blues song! MFS |
| Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 10/26/08 at 01:45 PM This stirs an empathetic sadness in me, something we all go through at one time another, and yet still wanting to see the morning light. I agree with some of the others...definitely a prayer...song. |
| Posted by Anastasia Selby on 10/28/08 at 02:02 AM this has a nice rythym..well done. |
| Posted by Tony Whitaker on 10/29/08 at 06:53 AM Thank you MFS for the suggestion. I just played this with a blues lick. The phrasing is pretty dang good with how the poem is written. Excellent Keith. |
| Posted by Charlie Morgan on 10/29/08 at 02:35 PM ...i thought i arrready read this, doh! mFs says blues song up 'til then i thought i wrote it...sometimes(wait til you get old boy!)as i do to get[cringe]older, tho' this had some melancholy to it, still it is sorta Everman's concern, that of the ol' end time, eh? tests one's faith |
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