| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 10/18/08 at 03:19 PM I love how the "porcelain" marries with the "shudders" in my mind. doctor, doctor - cool idea. Great last line. |
| Posted by Frankie Sanchez on 10/19/08 at 10:28 AM really. this is brilliant. "only the neon provided by the moment." are you kidding me? that is one of the most incredible lines you've written. and again with a killer author's note. i'm a fanboy with a lot to learn. |
| Posted by Trisha De Gracia on 10/20/08 at 04:26 AM THIS IS GORGEOUS! Really. + fav for sure, ugh, it makes me want to write more, and better. This is the kind of stuff I need to run across when I feel like there is nothing original anywhere. Simple, elegant, and vivid. Love it. |
| Posted by A. Paige White on 10/20/08 at 03:39 PM Dr. C. is in and will seize you now...
as gripping as the grip of a Worthy poem...
Spectabulous as youSual, Darlin. Your writing gives me chisel bumps... ;-D |
| Posted by Melanie J Yarbrough on 10/21/08 at 03:15 PM "there were no light and only the neon provided
by the moment"
so great. also, I always loved a well-placed "white hot" |
| Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 10/21/08 at 07:42 PM So it seems I'm not done with this one yet. The title - it's an address - brilliant. |
| Posted by Laurie Blum on 10/23/08 at 01:55 AM I am very moved by this poem, it has taken me a while to figure out a comment that describes the echoing sadness in this piece. You always make me 'feel' a poem SK. |
| Posted by Anastasia Selby on 10/23/08 at 04:00 PM I love the pace of this poem... |
