| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by A. Paige White on 10/10/08 at 06:06 PM Oh, the html definitely adds to the depth of it. Though I have to admit, I was quite convinced it was going somewhere "blonde" at first, lol. I was already empathizing with the non, well-maybe-occasionally, thinker... Yes, I am a sick, sick woman. Great poem George. |
| Posted by Alison McKenzie on 10/10/08 at 06:16 PM Excellent use of that tool, George! I hope she does, and I hope the "me" of it isn't as small as you portrayed. |
| Posted by Jeffrey Parren on 10/10/08 at 11:02 PM This is powerful even before the ending...the ending simply clinches everything while informing as well. ~JPP |
| Posted by Charles E Minshall on 10/12/08 at 07:06 PM Wishful thinking George? Fun reading....CharMin |
| Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 10/13/08 at 04:49 PM Simple questions made compelling by your structure here. Cool. |
| Posted by Sandy M. Humphrey on 10/13/08 at 08:58 PM I like the structure and that the thoughts would become more so throughout the day and yes even as her head lay you might whisper through her dreams. smh. |
| Posted by Tony Whitaker on 10/14/08 at 02:50 AM Cool use of HTML and it works well with the build up and then the ending is a nice turn. |
| Posted by Charlie Morgan on 10/14/08 at 02:44 PM ...george, i 'see' the constancy of one's worry o' life, re: being 'chosen' by a her...good re-post... |
| Posted by Laurie Blum on 10/15/08 at 01:56 PM The formatting really adds a new dimension to this piece. |
| Posted by Morgan D Hafele on 03/27/09 at 10:43 PM i really like this piece, i think i like it more because of the form you gave it. but i skipped the original and hopped straight into this one. |
