Pointe of Vieu

by Steven Kenworthy

for you i keep the images slightly digital
and voice pixelated i can feel myself breaking
up in breathing through with all of you
the sun shining blinding the window behind us
is bleaching the entire scene and it's to a point
where i can only see the deepest creases of
your skin slow dancing and then quickly.

this telescope is partially shattered and barely
focused only enough to give me the music video
i've been praying for for weeks or years
are so long for me to not be watching you
this entire time i've been shaking hard fighting for focus
from this afar you're brilliant and so bravely i
caught you in a staredown when things were just
beginning to pickup and they definitely did.


Author's Note: replacing my veins with her speaker wires

Posted on 10/02/2008
Copyright © 2018 Steven Kenworthy

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Gabriel Ricard on 10/02/08 at 02:12 AM

I think I tried something like that once. Sure feels like it, anyway. Excellent work, man.

Posted by Frankie Sanchez on 10/02/08 at 03:52 AM

brilliant. outstanding. vivid. memorable. incredibly memorable. and again with the author's note.

Posted by Sophia Grace on 10/02/08 at 04:17 PM

I love this. It feels so incredibly familiar. And you know, you inspire me to write more. Thank you. I know it doesn't sound like much but it's all I have and I am so grateful.

Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 10/02/08 at 07:39 PM

I enjoyed the play of the digital/pixelated voice - a pixelated voice - a totally unique thought. Line 4 is just too much fun to read over and over. You are the telescope - cool. I like the simplicity of "so bravely I caught you in a staredown" - nice. The author's note is electric.... ;)...

Posted by Frankie Sanchez on 10/02/08 at 07:48 PM

"this telescope is partially shattered" -- that image/idea/thought really resonates. i'd like to challenge you to write a poem that i'll dislike. write something worthless. please.

Posted by Gregory O'Neill on 10/02/08 at 10:36 PM

S.K., this feels like taking a big breath and trying to explain to her how and why it's been all about her, even if she missed that. It's complex and still attached at the same time. Nice work, mon.

Posted by Ava Blu on 10/02/08 at 11:05 PM

well, wtf can I add that hasn't already been said? 

you were right, it tickles me. :)
Posted by A. Paige White on 10/03/08 at 02:02 PM

Lovin this, Worthy! I so (too) dig-it-all, every word. So great to see you posting again! Bravo, Maistro.

Posted by Tony Whitaker on 10/06/08 at 03:29 PM

AH, what a great read. Brilliant.

Posted by Laurie Blum on 10/08/08 at 03:44 PM

I cannot say anymore than this is one of your best pieces...

Posted by Christina Bruno on 04/27/09 at 01:49 AM

very powerful, great job

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