|Member Comments on this Poem|
|Posted by Gabriel Ricard on 10/02/08 at 02:12 AM|
I think I tried something like that once. Sure feels like it, anyway. Excellent work, man.
|Posted by Frankie Sanchez on 10/02/08 at 03:52 AM|
brilliant. outstanding. vivid. memorable. incredibly memorable. and again with the author's note.
|Posted by Sophia Grace on 10/02/08 at 04:17 PM|
I love this. It feels so incredibly familiar. And you know, you inspire me to write more. Thank you. I know it doesn't sound like much but it's all I have and I am so grateful.
|Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 10/02/08 at 07:39 PM|
I enjoyed the play of the digital/pixelated voice - a pixelated voice - a totally unique thought. Line 4 is just too much fun to read over and over. You are the telescope - cool. I like the simplicity of "so bravely I caught you in a staredown" - nice. The author's note is electric.... ;)...
|Posted by Frankie Sanchez on 10/02/08 at 07:48 PM|
"this telescope is partially shattered" -- that image/idea/thought really resonates. i'd like to challenge you to write a poem that i'll dislike. write something worthless. please.
|Posted by Gregory O'Neill on 10/02/08 at 10:36 PM|
S.K., this feels like taking a big breath and trying to explain to her how and why it's been all about her, even if she missed that. It's complex and still attached at the same time. Nice work, mon.
|Posted by Ava Blu on 10/02/08 at 11:05 PM|
well, wtf can I add that hasn't already been said?
you were right, it tickles me. :)
|Posted by A. Paige White on 10/03/08 at 02:02 PM|
Lovin this, Worthy! I so (too) dig-it-all, every word. So great to see you posting again! Bravo, Maistro.
|Posted by Tony Whitaker on 10/06/08 at 03:29 PM|
AH, what a great read. Brilliant.
|Posted by Laurie Blum on 10/08/08 at 03:44 PM|
I cannot say anymore than this is one of your best pieces...
|Posted by Christina Bruno on 04/27/09 at 01:49 AM|
very powerful, great job