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Lightning Flash
by Kristina WoodhillThe lightning flashes,
as if to say,
"take a closer look
at this photo-op day.
You're too used
to sportin' those
ray-ban shades -
thin lipped faces
hidin' thick mental
haze."
"Kaboom! kaboom!"
adds a deep drummed
call -
sticks
hit the ground
in a hail of
iced balls.
Attempts to impress
deaf plugged-in ears,
inner beats deadened
from outer beats' fears.
The wind whip
adds its own special brand
slicked straight
with the rain
dripped in apathetic
sand.
The man stands naked,
stripped muscles
flanks raw;
the woman's breasts heave,
heart pumped
lungs draw.
The child does a dance
in the puddles that stream
through the smog smeared
streets of adults' blind dreams.
Touch a toe to the water
skip a rock on concrete
fling a hat to the sky
see the lightning flash speak.
08/19/2008
Author's Note: Answer to Barbara Dooley's challenge.
Posted on 08/19/2008
Copyright © 2024 Kristina Woodhill
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Heide McAlister-Bates on 08/19/08 at 03:14 PM This is a hell of an answer! I've said before that rhyme doesn't usually appeal to me, but this is definitely and exception. I found myself nodding in agreement as I read the first 5 stanzas, then smiling and nearly laughing with delight at the final three. A phenomenal bit of poetry, this. Kudos, Kristina. |
| Posted by A. Paige White on 08/19/08 at 03:26 PM I have to say you truly did this challenge justice! Great job! |
| Posted by George Hoerner on 08/19/08 at 04:03 PM Very well done Kristian! So many need the sun to shine as if they carry no light within! Just the children know! |
| Posted by Quentin S Clingerman on 08/21/08 at 08:08 PM Great description of a thunder storm with the added plus of symbolism of human relationships. |
| Posted by Brian Francis on 08/22/08 at 01:48 PM Oh what a wonderful storm you've captured here. I truly love the second to last stanza. Beautiful just beautiful. -bf |
| Posted by JD Clay on 08/24/08 at 03:49 PM Your attention to detail in this electric poem is quite admirable, Kristina. It has a spiritual quality with a sensual blend that Nature would both envy and admire. |
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