| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Charlie Morgan on 08/10/08 at 09:06 PM ...top drawer metaphor chris, i've heard them say they want to be smart but i tell 'em they'll have to put that formaldahyde joint down...serious work here. |
| Posted by Brian Francis on 08/11/08 at 02:38 PM Yep that is the way it was done. Can't say I miss the stupidity too much. Great work with the diver symbolism. Well said. -bf |
| Posted by Quentin S Clingerman on 08/13/08 at 01:59 AM Chillingly vivid! Tragically real! |
| Posted by Elizabeth Jill on 08/13/08 at 04:38 PM I've no first-hand knowledge of this, still - the kids I work with at the Center do. They're trying to get their lives back. Chris, this is very gripping. The title couldn't be more perfect! |
| Posted by Elizabeth Jill on 08/13/08 at 04:40 PM PS I'd like to share this with them tonight. It's diving directly into my favorites, too.
Jill |
| Posted by Morgan D Hafele on 08/14/08 at 12:07 PM maybe it's just me, but i really think it depends on how deep the diver is...some of them never seem to come up... |
| Posted by Matthew Zangen on 12/14/08 at 07:35 AM Holy--...yeesh. This is just too relatable for comfort, but so perfectly rendered. The tempo and length of the piece well fit the brilliant metaphor. I wish this didn't have to be explicit here so I could vote it for PotD; you've got such an extreme pro-tone that could chill anyone out of even a freeze--pun half-intended--but the overall success of this poem is undeniable. Awesome work, man. |
