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promises, promises
by Charlie Morganour vibes made us smile;
she owned her feelings,
a wide grin let them show.
as the fifty feet of air-space
closed to 2 feet, we both sighed.
knowing that soon we'd be one.
the day became ours; we frolicked.
we waltzed. we walked barefoot,
kicking loose soft, thin thistles.
then i closed my daydream's book,
she had not noticed i carried one;
she held tight a book of broken promises. 07/22/2008 Posted on 07/22/2008
Copyright © 2026 Charlie Morgan
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Dave Fitzgerald on 07/22/08 at 02:44 PM That's vivd and powerful. That last line is perfect. |
| Posted by Joe Cramer on 07/22/08 at 04:42 PM This is brilliant!!! |
| Posted by Genevieve Sturrock on 07/22/08 at 05:16 PM this probably shouldn't make me want to chuckle, but i couldn't help indulging in a bit of chagrinned laughter. well stated! |
| Posted by Alison McKenzie on 07/22/08 at 06:20 PM I love it when you let us peek into that book. I still have one, too...I sneak to write in it these days. Hehe. |
| Posted by Sandy M. Humphrey on 07/22/08 at 09:50 PM I hold tight a book of broken promises but have let loose some of the very weathered pages turned oft by my dreamer from time to time, funny how dreamers and the broken ones often recognize that little spark of something in each others eyes and the healing begins, well told and illustrated here. smh. |
| Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 07/24/08 at 04:28 AM This had me smiling, but that last line put a whole other spin on the daydreamin' and the two of you. Reminds me I have a book or two I could discard. |
| Posted by Laurie Blum on 07/24/08 at 01:14 PM So romantic Chaz! This poem just makes me smile each time I read it! |
| Posted by A. Paige White on 07/24/08 at 04:25 PM Wow, Chaz! Your poetry just gets better and better. What a feast! |
| Posted by Tony Whitaker on 07/25/08 at 03:52 AM That last line is the wind in this clever twist! |
| Posted by Joan Serratelli on 03/15/09 at 07:11 PM Broken promises? I'm an expert on those. Loved the last line! Great write (s usual) |
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