Member Comments on this Poem |
Posted by Mary Frances Spencer on 05/19/08 at 04:37 AM And so it continues...how can we shine some light into the faces of war? MFS |
Posted by Charlie Morgan on 05/19/08 at 04:56 PM ...dave, man, something sent me to read this, it is a righteous write, what a bunker full of feelings and sights...touche, meman, touche! charlie |
Posted by Rhiannon Jones on 05/23/08 at 01:59 PM Beautifully written, and memorable I predict. |
Posted by D. James McKee on 08/22/08 at 12:22 PM A powerful, powerful, piece of writing.
Congrats on POTD, well deserved! |
Posted by George Hoerner on 08/22/08 at 03:27 PM Congratulatons on a well deserved POTD. A very strong and well done piece. |
Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 08/22/08 at 03:53 PM Can't believe I missed this when it came out. A fine POTD! Very grim and powerful. The short lines give the reader quick punches - most effective. The title with its several meanings is brilliant. |
Posted by Michelle Angelini on 08/22/08 at 04:24 PM Dave, CONGRATULATIONS!!!!! on POTD! This one is a graphic reminder that peace on earth doesn't reign in all of its "corners." The subtle emotion in your words are actually extremely powerful. |
Posted by Sandy M. Humphrey on 08/24/08 at 12:27 AM Congrats of POTD, very descriptive and haunting. smh |
Posted by Shirin Swift on 08/26/08 at 01:05 AM lilting and nightmarish, well written |
Posted by Angela Nuzzo on 08/26/08 at 05:48 AM This is beautiful, Dave. The power of a single sound/smell/sight to trigger a flood of memories. As Daniel said, your rhyme & meter work wonderfully. I think it's because you varied each stanza, so the poem didn't become sing-songy. Nice job. |
Posted by Sophia Grace on 08/26/08 at 04:16 PM Beautiful job. I love being trapped in this nightmare-world. |