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Falling Down

by Steve Baba

The cloudy skies
Are pregnant with rain,

The green grassy hills
Open their mouths
For another helping,

Mountain tops will
Surely get dusted,

White snow
So light and soft.

02/26/2008

Posted on 02/27/2008
Copyright © 2018 Steve Baba

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Alison McKenzie on 02/27/08 at 05:32 PM

This is lovely.

Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 02/28/08 at 04:36 AM

Very nice touch to this.

Posted by Alisa Js on 11/23/08 at 05:04 PM

I loved the gentle visuals as they brushed across my mind's eye as I read through.... aloha....;-)

Posted by Nancy Ames on 11/28/08 at 12:01 AM

Checking out your writing and I enjoy your skill with language and your light touch that invites the reader into your thoughts. In this one, I thought that 'The green grassy hills open their mouths for another helping' was a very effective image.

Posted by Rowan Luis on 08/30/10 at 10:18 AM

i love this! it made me smile so wide. the hills do drink it up. oooh adding it to my favourites

Posted by Quentin S Clingerman on 03/31/11 at 12:03 PM

Sets a verbal atmosphere. Nature in its normal beauty.

Posted by Angela Stevens on 06/09/11 at 09:44 PM

'pregnant with rain' is gorgeous imagery. Very memorable.

Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 09/14/14 at 09:34 PM

Congrats on POTD! This retains its delicate feeling from when I first read it.

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