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Chatter
by Alisa JsI have listened to uncertain chatter
uneven across the night speak
felt your indecision
and waited
for how much longer, I can not know ...
as the sun makes it's way in the heavens
and we linger for nothing
waiver for naught
if this carries on, we'll be left in the rubble
of all we could have remembered
rather than this endless charade
of footsteps in passing
shadows that dance
heartbeats that do nothing but tremble
at circumstance ...
02/22/2008 Posted on 02/23/2008
Copyright © 2024 Alisa Js
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Gabriel Ricard on 02/23/08 at 04:38 AM Amazing. |
| Posted by Tony Whitaker on 02/23/08 at 07:39 AM Wow, Alisa! I read this three times and got something different every time!! Into my favorites and vote for POTD. This is your best for me.... |
| Posted by Alison McKenzie on 02/23/08 at 08:45 AM I identify with this feeling far too well, suffer the same worries at times. But then, just enough of a morsel will fall that I feel less hungry for it, for a moment anyway. I especially love the character lent to "night speak", for some reason. Well done. |
| Posted by George Hoerner on 02/23/08 at 04:09 PM Very well done Alisa. Uncertain is what it must be as life is uncertain. When certainty is spoken beware for was it sober spoken? Nice write. |
| Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 02/23/08 at 09:53 PM Another recent best in my opinion. You've shed the clichés, and forged a powerful expression that will stand for centuries to all those who will relate to it as per their own lives. |
| Posted by Keith McFarlane on 02/24/08 at 06:41 AM Indecision is a hallmark of ambiguous relationships. You seem to have your finger on the pulse of something very deep, Alisa -- well done, well written. |
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