|Member Comments on this Poem|
|Posted by David Garner on 02/06/08 at 10:40 PM|
and my favorite lines are immediately following Marie's favorite lines. "water in my blood
air in my breast
beat to my beat
breath to my breath"--a really complex portrait of someone you love. I love it.
|Posted by David R Spellman on 02/07/08 at 11:23 PM|
Indeed a very sweet sentiment and a wonderful Valentine!
|Posted by Tony Whitaker on 02/07/08 at 11:41 PM|
S2 and S3 are absolutes in romanticism. Beautiful!
|Posted by Charles E Minshall on 02/08/08 at 06:16 PM|
|Posted by Maria Massarella on 02/09/08 at 11:17 PM|
I adore this! in it's entirety... and yet there where you wrote "breath to my breath" ... I could linger in that forever.
|Posted by Wendy Sparling on 02/12/08 at 12:00 AM|
I like "you are my fickle" You make me smile with this honest remark.
|Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 02/12/08 at 03:32 PM|
Much excellence in this simplicity. Congrats on hitting No. 1 Heather. :o)
|Posted by Lauren Singer on 02/12/08 at 07:32 PM|
the third and fourth stanzas really do it for me. nice work.
|Posted by Mara Meade on 02/12/08 at 08:27 PM|
This poem, for companion or for the poetry of expression, is a keeper! This is wonderful!
|Posted by Jim Benz on 02/13/08 at 07:26 PM|
lovely valentines poem, without falling into sappiness. I particularly like "my rogue and jester / my knight and knave". It starts the poem off on a perfect foot. If this weren't more suitable for a man, I'd steal it and give it to my wife. Maybe I'll steal the form...
|Posted by Kristine Briese on 02/14/08 at 02:54 PM|
This is a delight!
|Posted by Charles M Harrison on 03/04/10 at 01:16 AM|
How were you able to describe my wife so well. Very nice.