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by Shannon Adele

Today I am unintentionally
green and blood inside.

My feet sort of hurt
From walking
On all of those eggshells
That you left
On the floor and all over
The floor.

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12/17/2007

Posted on 12/18/2007
Copyright © 2019 Shannon Adele

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Gabriel Ricard on 12/18/07 at 04:13 AM

I really, really like the image in the second stanza. It just makes for a great visual.

Posted by Michelle Angelini on 12/18/07 at 04:49 AM

Such an interesting image of pain. The repetition in the last stanza is the echo that might be bing-bonging around in the mind when trying to let go of something that hurts, but maybe stubbornness keeps holding on to it. At least that's the way I sense it.
~Chelle~

Posted by Meghan Helmich on 12/04/08 at 06:34 PM

that opening is really new.

'i am....green and blood inside..'

i mean, who says that? i love it.

Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 02/04/15 at 04:31 AM

Fascinating stuff.

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