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who's counting what?
by Charlie Morganafternoon whirls around showing off her new dress;
plush with breezy pleats of warm, stirring the air
and no rough winds to stop the hem from flying high.
i dance a jingle thru the parking lot, she spins me
and gently lets me smile back at her as she waltzes
alone until the next downtowner needs a kindly lift.
mixed emotions are my laser to work ahead of me now;
noises reminding me of new buildings, new growth and
i'm busy spelling osteoporisis forward, then backward. 12/11/2007 Posted on 12/11/2007
Copyright © 2026 Charlie Morgan
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Joe Cramer on 12/11/07 at 04:25 PM An excellent write! |
| Posted by Michelle Angelini on 12/11/07 at 06:02 PM Charlie, you can make the most ordinary afternoon appear like a beautiful woman and bring out the hidden issues that are at the root of noticing the day.
~Chelle~ |
| Posted by Alison McKenzie on 12/11/07 at 07:34 PM Alot going on here, Charlie!!! But I love the vision of this beautiful distraction, the whirling woman and her dress. |
| Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 12/11/07 at 07:36 PM A dancing reminder of warmth and breezy moments just ready for us to join in. Quite charming - it lifts me gently even as you remind me in the end of realities I have to deal with daily. Somehow I don't worry so much after reading this. |
| Posted by Mary Ellen Smith on 12/12/07 at 02:10 AM oh I do love this totally original take on fall, right? Lovely! |
| Posted by A. Paige White on 12/12/07 at 03:52 AM Grimacing and grabbing her back, the Chaz breeze oscillates while decoding his last line...
and suddddenly the keyboard crashes to the floor to add an extra special element of sudden to her surprise
as her shriek of dismay reaches upward and outward the boy friend of daughter rushes to her rescue. Record time reassembly provokes "You made that look so simple!" and replies to her appreciation, "I may have done it once or twice, maybe twice more than once."
Sis i ropo esto to you, dear sir! And I thoroughly enjoyed your verses! Whew! even if it was a battle to comment on it.
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| Posted by Alisa Js on 12/12/07 at 05:15 AM Thank you for giving us this snapshot into your world and mind.. aloha to you and yours from this side of paradise...;-) |
| Posted by Morgan D Hafele on 12/12/07 at 05:28 AM it feels like any afternoon and it feels like an extraordinary afternoon... to capture both and walk away like it was just a dream, but too real to be just that... i'd like to walk with her. |
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