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topic: why did she do that
by Ava Blu
at the window
right before dawn
he misses the beat misses the point
in her vocal chords
she wont care
i told you,
she doesnt pay attention to these things
and he doesnt want to remember
he doesnt want to be stuck walking on sand
walking away
at the door
right after dusk
he misses the confetti
in her hair
she wouldnt mind
his clammy palms around her wrists
but hell never believe shes real
she wont do it again with him
and theyll both believe
in something outside of the others realm
and will never
touch again.
08/31/2007 Author's Note: topic by Kyle Anne! :)
Posted on 08/31/2007
Copyright © 2026 Ava Blu
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Aaron Michael on 08/31/07 at 09:03 PM good take on the topic. i dig it, yo :) |
| Posted by Kyle Anne Kish on 08/31/07 at 09:58 PM Jeanna, you took the topic and ran with it. I love the "confetti in her hair" line. One night stands can be one heck of a problem the next morning ... especially if the person was a friend. Yo. Beautifully done. |
| Posted by Gabriel Ricard on 09/01/07 at 02:42 PM Looks like she gave you a good one. |
| Posted by Kathleen Wilson on 09/03/07 at 02:24 AM Strong, vital expression of what is hard to aknowledge, identify, express. The sparks of detail that make the message clear-- what he does not see or hear--and how different what the "believe" --the "realm" difference is put forth with a pungent voice. The resolute
"she wont do it again with him" clarifies, encapsulates the pent emotion. |
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