A Fleeting Moment
by James A Holt
Dance with me under the
Pale moonlight while I softly sing your name.
Close your eyes and allow
Our steps to carry us away.
Feel the wind carress your face
As we soar across the sky.
And hold the moment in your heart while the
Rest of the world walks by.
Author's Note: I just revised the first half of the 4th stanza. I think it does flow better now. Thanks for the suggestions!
Posted on 05/29/2007
Copyright © 2023 James A Holt
|Member Comments on this Poem|
|Posted by Alison McKenzie on 05/29/07 at 09:12 PM|
This is gorgeous, and yes, the title does fit IMHO, for those kind of moments are fleeting. And yet, those kind of moments are also the ones that make the most lasting, lovely memories.
|Posted by A. Paige White on 05/30/07 at 02:40 AM|
The first three stanzas put me on the riverwalk in New Orleans. My sweetheart and I have actually done that to some of the coolest impromptu serenades... once to haunting rhythmic bells and drums by a couple with a boot for donations... Thank you for this wonderful reminder. The 4th one seems just a bit abrupt as suddenly one half of the equation must have left the scene if requesting dreams. The second half of the 4th, "as the rest....." still carries the flow so maybe revise the 1st 1/2 of the 4th to capture the togetherness... Still, quite lovely. Something like,
|Posted by Gregory Oregon on 05/30/07 at 04:42 PM|
very simple and eloquent. i believe it to be far more difficult to be pithy and concise while poetic, than to be verbose and vague. good job
|Posted by Philip F De Pinto on 04/29/13 at 12:39 PM|
a beautifully rendered ode.