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Thursday's Lullabye
by Elizabeth SeagoAnd I swim
Through the blue abyss
That is
Your sin.
The water is thick
And every kick
Is a fight.
But if it made you smile,
This is how I would live my life.
So I kick and stroke,
Destination unknown.
Hoping only to find a home
In the good of you.
And I ask for not much more
Than you to deplore
In my fantasy of swimming ashore
And your life breathing into me evermore
With three coughs and a smile,
I'd let you hold me for awhile
And you'd fall for the love
Whose words had never really been enough,
But was entirely too tough
To give up.
05/03/2007 Posted on 05/04/2007
Copyright © 2024 Elizabeth Seago
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Alison McKenzie on 05/06/07 at 04:35 PM "hoping only to find a home in the good of you." I love the brilliance of this!!! |
| Posted by Steven Kenworthy on 05/08/07 at 12:57 AM it's all about never giving up isn't it? a nice little aquatic bedtime tale here for us lover types. "if i made you smile this is how i would live my life"...this is bravery. this is the sound of an unselfishness i think everyone wishes they could live with but can't. this poem is ultra sweet though and i can see where your life is going with this piece. the rhyming is cute, but i prefer the free verse of course. this felt like a song though...something to dream off to. much love as always es. |
| Posted by Jared Fladeland on 05/08/07 at 08:40 PM the rhythm is exquisite. it's very hip hopish in how it delivers a hook and then a punch |
| Posted by Kristine Briese on 05/13/07 at 03:42 PM Simply beautiful. |
| Posted by Kyle Anne Kish on 05/14/07 at 01:55 AM Congratulations on your POTD! Well deserved. |
| Posted by Michelle Angelini on 05/14/07 at 03:16 AM Beautiful - I get a different rhythym out of it. For me it's flowing and gentle. CONGRATULATIONS ON POTD! (this is no taco, huh?) ;-)
~Chelle~ |
| Posted by JD Clay on 05/15/07 at 03:16 AM I love all three stanzas but the second really strikes a chord, Elizabeth. Congratulations on becoming The Poet Of The Day.
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